: Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that schools solely focus on academic lessons and examinations rather than investing in activities such as cookery or dressmaking. While I agree that pursuing a successful academic education is essential, I also believe that schools should not cut down on these extra-curricular activities.
On the one hand, schools provide their students academic knowledge to chase after a proper career. Many jobs on the market require an academic knowledge, particularly for high-flyers who pursue a successful career to become a lawyer, doctor. If a literary talent, for example, is more serious on academic literature and fiction than hand-made activities, she will find it worth taking an arduous process to earn high score on the examination. Furthermore, in some extended families, older generations can impart those handicraft lessons to their offspring at some certain points.
On the other hand, I believe that those skills such as cookery or dressmaking should be considered as an essential subject at institutions. First, those subject help children to get away from tremendous hours studying academic lessons. Students are often put under pressure that it is their duty to get a high score when sitting on exams. Taking part in those extra-curricular activities is an opportunity to get away from it all and even boost interest in compulsory lessons. Second, schools should not cut down on those subjects because not all children have a supportive family to teach them all skills. A single-parent household may not have a father who shows their children how to work with woods, or working mothers lacking time to cook a meal with their children.
In conclusion, while pursuing a successful education is school's priority, I believe that it is necessary to preserve those extra-curricular activities as compulsory subjects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 773, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ime to cook a meal with their children. In conclusion, while pursuing a successf...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, if, may, second, so, while, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35862068966 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07953237026 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.572413793103 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.273652754 49.4020404114 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 119.538461538 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3076923077 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.30769230769 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21599225918 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792033192831 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0746297178078 0.0667982634062 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13837790347 0.151304729494 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859801677504 0.056905535591 151% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.