Schools should focus on academic success and passing examinations. Skills such as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork should not be taught at school as it is better to learn these from family and friends
I approve of academic success and passing examinations is the centre of attention at school. However, many skills such as cookery, dressmaking, woodwork should not be taught at school is not the best way for pupils these day. I believed that there are many better ways far outweigh that idea.
To begin with, teaching skills in the same manner with cookery, dressmaking and woodwork at school will bring many benefits for students and play an indispensable role in the life. Learning these skills with the educators at school help students have a standardized curriculum, it makes sure that this is robust foundation of knowledge for students to get a wall-paid job in the future. Besides, there are opputunities for pupils to not only improve their teamwork but also develop their social skills. For instance, if pupils study abroad or live in some where is far from their parents, knowing about cooking skills will be a huge advantages as they can cook themselves whatever they want, meeting their own nutritional needs, living independently and also saving some money to pay for vital things later.
In addition, one of reasons why non-academic subjects are taught at school instead of taught at home mainly because at school there is better learning area, have many peers to compete for the motivation and it is more professional. Moreover, some families’ background are extremely difficult and even if they do not have enough time to earn a living, let alone studying that subjects at home. Thus, the richness of learning some skills just as cookery, dressmaking and woodwork far surpasses the shallowness of learning ones at home.
In conclusion, although learning cookery, dressmaking and woodwork at home in some case might be good, there are a bunch of different circumstances demonstrate that is not the best way as I mentioned above.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 216, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this day' or 'these days'?
Suggestion: this day; these days
...t school is not the best way for pupils these day. I believed that there are many better ...
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Line 2, column 551, Rule ID: SOME_WHERE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'somewhere'?
Suggestion: somewhere
...ance, if pupils study abroad or live in some where is far from their parents, knowing abou...
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Line 2, column 633, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'advantage'?
Suggestion: advantage
...ing about cooking skills will be a huge advantages as they can cook themselves whatever th...
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Line 4, column 116, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'bunches'?
Suggestion: bunches
...in some case might be good, there are a bunch of different circumstances demonstrate ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, moreover, so, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1547.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07213114754 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78129429538 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55737704918 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.0220560164 49.4020404114 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.636363636 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6363636364 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355651925937 0.244688304435 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.140990330987 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107310038865 0.0667982634062 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225240702252 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117003908521 0.056905535591 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 13.0946893788 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 50.2224549098 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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