In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting universities studies Discuss the advantage and disadvantage for young people who decide to do this

Thesedays, in some countries , young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies..This trend, in many cases, should be more beneficial

First , A gap year a working or traveling seems to certainly create opportunities for young people to explore the world.That means , after a year, young people would spend time traveling to new lands, countries to expand their knowledge , learn about the big world outside.Specifically, young people would spend this one-year time volunteering , doing the work they want. Thanks to that, it brings many benefits such as: relaxation after a long time of studying, supplementing more many achievements on your resume, and finding the right direction for yourself in the future.For example,my sister, she has chosen a gap year to do creator content, thanks to job , my sister knows that she is not really suitable for this job. If you were, would you choose a gap year ?

However, admittedly a gap year might interrupt the learning process..This may , in some cases, lead to the further worsening that students will no longer feel interested in learning , so they may not continue to return to school. The present essay draws on the work of psychologist Mr.Donald trump from East University , who said that more than 20% of the young people who chose a gap year surveyed by him did not want to go back to school To exemplify this point , my friend Tom, who choosing a gap year before going to college to travel , explore the world, but this made him choose to do a travel vlog instead of going to college as originally planned.
In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I believe that the benefits of choosing a gap year outweigh the disadvantages.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, really, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, in many cases, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 13.1623246493 30% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1462.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 293.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98976109215 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91775647983 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587030716724 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 423.9 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 20.2975951904 236% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 181.777030697 49.4020404114 368% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 243.666666667 106.682146367 228% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.8333333333 20.7667163134 235% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 17.8333333333 7.06120827912 253% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.417840804382 0.244688304435 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165629732753 0.084324248473 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.162271571787 0.0667982634062 243% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.264374214435 0.151304729494 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1459667857 0.056905535591 257% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.5 13.0946893788 202% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.68 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.6 11.3001002004 173% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.55 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 9.78957915832 291% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 10.1190380762 210% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.