In some countries, young people are not only richer but also safer and healthier than ever before. However, they are less happy. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?
There is an observation in the segment of world that health, safety and wealth have prospered and become better than those in the past while happiness largely lags behind them. I am a strong believer that there are several sources triggering these which can be patched up by appropriate solutions.
First of all, no one can deny that today's cutting edge technology and science have had a profound effect on society leading to both negative and positive consequences. While safety, health and wealth were being improved by implementing scientific inventions into corresponding sectors such as HSE, the other face of this process were invading peoples' mind . The smartphones which nowadays are ubiquitously used by teens actually convey messages into their mind subconsciously. In other words, by spending most of their time on different websites and social media, adds popping up can mess with their way of thinking to make them buy a particular product. If product can increase a mood, the ad producers are more likely to create such illustrations that will result in lower their frame of mind. That is why the unknown source of sadness is possibly caused by technological development.
To address the problem, they can put some distance between themselves and their favorite gadgets to avert the inevitable change of mood. That is why the young should look for different type of recreational activities which have nothing to do with any technology or subconscious messages. Being involved with the sport is usually said to affect positively not only the human health but also his mind making him feel jubilant. Hence, if they get used to doing these healthy activities, the problem can be solved.
To conclude, in some countries happiness has turned out to be serious problem for young individuals in contrast to the other factors including health. Since the technology is pointed to be one of the major reasons why the problem happens, avoiding it as much as possible and focusing on other kinds of activities are thought to be the possible solution.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... this process were invading peoples mind . The smartphones which nowadays are ubiq...
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Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
... can be solved. To conclude, in some countries happiness has turned out to be serious ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, while, in contrast, such as, first of all, in contrast to, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09763313609 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77751445398 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633136094675 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6658247352 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.071428571 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118233602008 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403131538806 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276728109637 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692807437957 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276351620501 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 356, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... this process were invading peoples mind . The smartphones which nowadays are ubiq...
^^
Line 7, column 22, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'countries'' or 'country's'?
Suggestion: countries'; country's
... can be solved. To conclude, in some countries happiness has turned out to be serious ...
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, while, in contrast, such as, first of all, in contrast to, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09763313609 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77751445398 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 176.041082164 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.633136094675 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 506.74238477 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.6658247352 49.4020404114 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.071428571 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.118233602008 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0403131538806 0.084324248473 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0276728109637 0.0667982634062 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0692807437957 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0276351620501 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.