In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message
Moral support from parents play an important role in children's success. In many cultures, parents tell their children that anything can be achieved if they put enough efforts in it. This essay will discuss the main benefits including succeeding in career and achieving one's passion and will also discuss the drawbacks including pressure from parents and depression.
Children are often faced with pressure from their parents and depression, parents always force their children to go for something they want rather than what the children want. To further elaborate, telling them to become a doctor or an engineer if they try hard enough, can become a nightmare for children if they do not have any passion or interest for it. This can cause immense depression in children which ultimately affects their personality. For example, in Pakistan, many children commit suicide every day because they are forced to do something that they do not want to do. Oftentimes, pressuring children and giving them depression just because that they can achieve anything can cost them their lives.
On the other hand, those parents who support in the career path chosen by their children often results in positive outcomes. Children choosing their passion as the career and having moral support from their parents to try hard enough makes them successful in their lives. As an example, Arijit Singh, a famous Indian singer became successful in his career because his parents supported him in his journey. Lastly, supporting them in their passion and telling them that anything can be achieved can result in successful outcomes.
In conclusion, children are often guided in many countries around the world that anything can be attained if one strives hard enough for it. This essay discussed the advantages including career success and passion and presented the disadvantages including parent’s pressure and depression.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ding succeeding in career and achieving ones passion and will also discuss the drawb...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29372937294 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55845620134 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478547854785 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1805963996 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.571428571 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351154523014 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141125154159 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814883184364 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226082514618 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910867564507 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 270, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ding succeeding in career and achieving ones passion and will also discuss the drawb...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, so, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 24.0651302605 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29372937294 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55845620134 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478547854785 0.561755894193 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 477.9 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.1805963996 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.571428571 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6428571429 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78571428571 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.351154523014 0.244688304435 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141125154159 0.084324248473 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814883184364 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226082514618 0.151304729494 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0910867564507 0.056905535591 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.