Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with

Essay topics:

Some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with.

It is often thought that a lot of mothers and fathers are spending a huge amount of wealth on their children's toys. In the next paragraphs, I will discuss the advantages and the disadvantages of this issue.

First of all, it will increase the happiness of the youngsters. The reason for this is that they will receive a large variety of playful things, which can amuse them for a long period of time. In other words, those counterparts are able to have a joyful childhood. For example, a large number of friends will come over to play with the games as well. Furthermore, this can increase their socialise with other people as well. So, this can be really favourable for the kids.

On the other hand, it is a waste of money. This is because they do not need all those plastic objects to spend their time and make progress in their knowledge. However, sometimes is alright but not too much. For example, our grandparents were using their fantasy to entertain themselves in the past. On top of that, they still experienced a cheerful life with pleasant memories. All in all, providing money on unnecessary things is a waste of earnings.

To conclude, a lot of parents are buying their children a massive amount of toys. However, it can make an upward trend in the cheerfulness of our sons and daughters. Although, it is not required to spend a lot to give them a great infancy. In other words, it can be provided in different ways.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...things, which can amuse them for a long period of time. In other words, those counterparts are...
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Line 3, column 279, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...o have a joyful childhood. For example, a large number of friends will come over to play with the...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[4]
Message: The adverb 'sometimes' is usually put after the verb 'is'.
Suggestion: is sometimes
...e progress in their knowledge. However, sometimes is alright but not too much. For example, ...
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Line 7, column 167, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cheerfulness of our sons and daughters. Although, it is not required to spend a lot to g...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, really, so, still, well, for example, first of all, in other words, on the other hand, on top of that

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1183.0 1615.20841683 73% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62109375 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64175445058 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.54296875 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 355.5 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.2975951904 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.4516181758 49.4020404114 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 65.7222222222 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.2222222222 20.7667163134 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.72222222222 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203822940265 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540402962273 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0789526688513 0.0667982634062 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107146287927 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0294185694399 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.4 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.19 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.92 12.4159519038 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.29 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 78.4519038076 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.1190380762 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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