Some people believe that individuals who earn a lot of money are the most successful. Others say that the individuals who contribute to the society (such as scientists or teachers) are the most successful.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
As society develops, citizens around the world hold different views of successful people. When asked about a thriving individual, the vast majority of people say that they are somebody who has a massive income, but other people view triumphant people as those who have a positive impact on the human race. Before rendering my opinion, I think it is important to take a glance at the arguments on both sides.
As the proverb goes, "money talks", means that people who are rich can get whatever they want. They can not only fulfill their essential needs but also expenses or even exclusive things. They hardly find any difficulties in their lives, hence, nowadays, almost all of the younger generation, especially in developing countries, consider wealthy individuals as the most successful. Admittedly, affluent people occupy more important roles in modern society, thus, creating a bigger impact. For example, billionaires such as Jeff Bezos and Elon Musk are always regarded as the most successful individuals based solely on their net worth.
On the other hand, there is clearly no doubt that the human race needs individuals who can help improve as well as strengthen it. However, those who only possible to earn money without making any donation to the community can not be considered as successful. In contrast, scientists or teachers are believed to be the most successful thanks to their in-depth knowledge as well as high social status. Being an intelligentsia is not easy, so individuals must devote a significant amount of time to gaining insight in order to meet the requirements of those senior positions. Consequently, they are recognised and respected by others as the most successful in society.
In conclusion, though being wealthy might be regarded as successful, I believe that those who contribute to the human race are the most successful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, if, so, then, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, in contrast, no doubt, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1577.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22185430464 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88922607233 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615894039735 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 489.6 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0499805573 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.642857143 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.7857142857 7.06120827912 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.347876049663 0.244688304435 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102889605417 0.084324248473 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0571257259409 0.0667982634062 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191695029782 0.151304729494 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0490588414824 0.056905535591 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.17 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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