Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities . others , however , say that would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
The problem of having a good health for humankind is always common in modern life . While some groups say that adding more sport facilities will help to improve public health , other ones say that is not suffient , there also has other measures need to be taken into consideration . However , In my opinion , I strongly support for the second view.
There are some reasons for people believing in the first view . Firstly , people can easily access to those sport facilites like swimming pool , gym ,etc . So they will spend more spare time for training rather than siting at home ,which is harmful for their health . Secondly , there is a wide range of different facilites , so they can pick up some sports involve with their preferences . As the result , they will gain a better health in their life .
Although that method brings many benefits for the societies , but it still far from being the best method . The disadvantage of that method is that just only effect with those , loving sporting , and effect a little on those who do not like outdoor activities . Because of that , there are some alternative methods can help people attaining a good health without going to sport facilities . Firstly , having a balance diet which is eating fresh food and vegestables . Secondly , the government can reduce the fee of treatment and build more hospital in city .
In conclusion , while there are some arguments about what is the best measures for obtaining good health, I still advocate for the second view.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92430278884 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46628842386 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597609561753 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9352966865 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2857142857 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.01903807615 598% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276088066552 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874450007448 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825719931771 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175616839982 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104640761549 0.056905535591 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...umankind is always common in modern life . While some groups say that adding more ...
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...ities will help to improve public health , other ones say that is not suffient , t...
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...th , other ones say that is not suffient , there also has other measures need to b...
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...ures need to be taken into consideration . However , In my opinion , I strongly su...
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...to be taken into consideration . However , In my opinion , I strongly support for ...
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... consideration . However , In my opinion , I strongly support for the second view....
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...s for people believing in the first view . Firstly , people can easily access to t...
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...le believing in the first view . Firstly , people can easily access to those sport...
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...those sport facilites like swimming pool , gym ,etc . So they will spend more spar...
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...sport facilites like swimming pool , gym ,etc . So they will spend more spare time...
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... facilites like swimming pool , gym ,etc . So they will spend more spare time for ...
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... home ,which is harmful for their health . Secondly , there is a wide range of dif...
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...h is harmful for their health . Secondly , there is a wide range of different faci...
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...e is a wide range of different facilites , so they can pick up some sports involve...
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...me sports involve with their preferences . As the result , they will gain a better...
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...e with their preferences . As the result , they will gain a better health in their...
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... will gain a better health in their life . Although that method brings many benef...
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...d brings many benefits for the societies , but it still far from being the best me...
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... it still far from being the best method . The disadvantage of that method is that...
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...thod is that just only effect with those , loving sporting , and effect a little o...
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...only effect with those , loving sporting , and effect a little on those who do not...
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...those who do not like outdoor activities . Because of that , there are some altern...
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...ike outdoor activities . Because of that , there are some alternative methods can ...
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...health without going to sport facilities . Firstly , having a balance diet which i...
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...hout going to sport facilities . Firstly , having a balance diet which is eating f...
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...ich is eating fresh food and vegestables . Secondly , the government can reduce th...
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...ng fresh food and vegestables . Secondly , the government can reduce the fee of tr...
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...reatment and build more hospital in city . In conclusion , while there are some ...
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... more hospital in city . In conclusion , while there are some arguments about wh...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, while, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 26.0 41.998997996 62% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1236.0 1615.20841683 77% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92430278884 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46628842386 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.597609561753 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9352966865 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2857142857 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 20.7667163134 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.42857142857 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 5.01903807615 598% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276088066552 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0874450007448 0.084324248473 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0825719931771 0.0667982634062 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175616839982 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104640761549 0.056905535591 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.96 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 78.4519038076 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.