Some people say that outdoor activities bring benefits to children's development rather than computer games, To what extent do you agree/disagree?
The development of technology and computer games has created heated controversy about this type of entertainment. While computer games are undeniably appealing, I totally subscribe to the notion that a traditional playground outside bring more huge advantages to a child's development, both physically and mentally.
Firstly, outdoor activities help boost children's stamina while computer games will deplete their health. Youngsters who are addicted to computer games often spend hours having their eyes glued to the screen, as a result, they are prone to short-sightedness and other optic ailments. Besides, computer games are often played on a bed or chair, therefore children may end up being a potato couch. This sedentary lifestyle leads to countless consequences such as obesity. In contrast, playing outdoors force kids to be physically active, resulting in stronger muscles and stamina. Moreover, the stimuli and sunlight from the outer environment strengthen children's immune system, which is brutal for them to lead a healthy life.
Secondly, computer games may harm the immature brain of young people but real-world activities can nurture it. Computer games, though categorized and labelled according to age groups, are still difficult to control children's access to them. Inappropriate, even depraved games with pornography or violence may distort an off-spring's cognitive and may result in twisted personalities in the future. On the contrary, playing in open space such as building sand castle definitely develop imagination and dexterity. Additionally, going out creates chances for making new friends, which is beneficial to foster communication and interpersonal skills.
In conclusion, playing online games is detrimental to physical and mental health of young people, while participating in outdoors activities brings great merits to a child's physique and well-being.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, as a result, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1610.0 1615.20841683 100% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.770609319 5.12529762239 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09030004922 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.681003584229 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.9220385995 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.0 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9285714286 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.3571428571 7.06120827912 175% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214862927957 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0697788625827 0.084324248473 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0524059819651 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126726334764 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0138597832508 0.056905535591 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 50.2224549098 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.19 12.4159519038 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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