Some people say that too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
In recent decades, animal and bird protections have been attracting a great deal of media attention due to its substantial impacts on human’s development. From my standpoint, I believe that humans are paying too much attention and allocating too many resources to this issue.
There are a number of reasons why too much attention and too many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. First, Many non-governmental organizations are established, which express and exaggerate their concern about animals in an unnecessary way. For example, many animal preservation groups have accused Katy Perry of using the tiger in her latest video for commercial purposes while in fact, she does not. Second, many governments are using the vast majority of national revenues for animal and bird reservations. For instance, A high degree of Vietnamese official authorities’ disbursements on the construction of animal preservation parks could be conducive to lower capital investments in other public sectors such as healthcare, housing, and transportation, deteriorating citizens’ living standards.
However, governments and citizens should undertake many practical and effective measures to protect animals and birds without any financial burdens. First, the legislation of heavy punishments on any practices of killing or smuggling animals and birds should be enacted. This would act as an incentive for animal and bird populations as individuals with any intents would take the heavy fine into consideration. In addition, Citizens be informed about the negative consequences of animal extinction through some programs on mainstream media. These programs strengthen their desire for animal preservation and therefore many aminals or birds on the verge of extinction could be saved.
In conclusion, Attention and resources are given to wild animal and bird protections in a wasteful way. Nevertheless, citizens and official authorities should cooperate to find the best solution to tackle this issue.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider replacing "in an unnecessary way" with adverb for "unnecessary"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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Message: Consider replacing "in a wasteful way" with adverb for "wasteful"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ven to wild animal and bird protections in a wasteful way. Nevertheless, citizens and official au...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 12.0 24.0651302605 50% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 8.3376753507 216% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1734.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 302.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.7417218543 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.27036336253 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.576158940397 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.4199992086 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.857142857 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5714285714 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.78571428571 7.06120827912 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296790208038 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119538191975 0.084324248473 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.137348048589 0.0667982634062 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19358187013 0.151304729494 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0528987916307 0.056905535591 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.01 12.4159519038 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.