Some people think that children should aim to their best at what they are doing while others believe it is not necessary for them. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
The idea that the young generation should try their best at what they are doing remains a source of controversy. While there are numerous people who believe that children do not need to excel at everything in their lives, I strongly agree that setting the optimal goals is the best way to get more motivated in life.
On the one hand, the youth would be less like to suffer from stress or depression when they do not aim to the best. In terms of education, teenagers are facing the problem that they are expected to get high scores and pass the entrance exam to attend prestigious universities by their teachers and parents. In other words, they have to study hard as well as burn the midnight oil to learn day by day. As a result, more and more students have experienced a sense of depression due to the overloaded load of homework. Not to mention the fact that when striving to the best, they always compare themselves with other peers about academic results, this would lead to mental health problems more seriously.
On the other hand, I would argue that the benefits of aiming to the best cannot be overlooked. Firstly, when young learners have the goal of being accepted in their dream tertiary education, they would study harder and afford relentlessly to pursue their ideal schools without feeling exhausted. Regarding work, they would work more assiduously to climb up career ladders that they have dreamed of for a long time. Consequently, the more they work, the more satisfied they feel. Without target in life, they might not have enough motivation to work hard every day.
In conclusion, whereas some people contend that it is more stressful when young people constantly aim to their best, it seems to me that the merits of this trend are more remarkable for all the mentioned reasons.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, firstly, if, look, regarding, so, well, whereas, while, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1490.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 313.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76038338658 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20616286096 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46252314736 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.562300319489 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 443.7 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.4032261577 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.615384615 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0769230769 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5384615385 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247379085216 0.244688304435 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.092714281897 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644332930856 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169621315424 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0718950170056 0.056905535591 126% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 50.2224549098 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 12.4159519038 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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