Some people think competitive sport is important for a child's education. Others think it has negative effects on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion
A group of people sometimes argue that competitive sport could play a vital role in a child's education however others hold that it could negatively affect a child.while I agree that rivalry sports is essential in schools I also think it could demoralize a child who isn't talented in sports.
First and Foremost,rivalry sports is important as a part of education owing to the fact that it not only teaches kids to work hard towards achieving their goals so as to stand out,it also motivates other to work even harder to achieve what their opponents have achieved.To illustrate,back in high school we used to have intergroup sports competitions all the time.The group that won would feel really good about it.this in turn translated to class work where the competition was transferred to sort of prove a point.This made us work hard in class.Thus a little sports rivalry can be quite healthy hence my support of its vitality in a child's education.
On the other hand,This kind of rivalry could potentially have detrimental effects to the kids.This is because incase of a child with generally low self esteem,they could get so demoralised that they probably won't want to participate in other activities.For instance you'll usually find a child that isn't doing so well in sports isolated and even afraid to partake other activities in school for fear of stigmatization. Thus my opinion about the potential negative impact of sports competitions.
To sum up,even though sports competition is vital for motivation,it could also have the opposite effect on other kids.
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1318.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 258.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10852713178 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.00778971557 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9958708037 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612403100775 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 406.8 506.74238477 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 51.0 20.2975951904 251% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 210.617568118 49.4020404114 426% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 263.6 106.682146367 247% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 51.6 20.7667163134 248% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 25.4 7.06120827912 360% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.01903807615 418% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
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Sentence topic coherence: 0.139246887874 0.084324248473 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0391838349961 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152629164761 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0416830920773 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 28.4 13.0946893788 217% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 19.71 50.2224549098 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 15.9 7.44779559118 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 23.2 11.3001002004 205% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.25 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.9 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 9.78957915832 312% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 22.4 10.1190380762 221% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 10.7795591182 288% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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