Some people think that cultural traditions will be destroyed if they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others, however, believe that is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the period when many cultural traditions are commercialised, while many people think that our traditional heritages will be spoiled if they are used to make money, I would argue that commercialisation is also an integral part in preserving such traditions.
On the one hand, it is clear that travelling abroad is becoming more affordable and easier, as an obvious result, this trend has caused many negative impacts on indigenous traditions. Firstly, meaning of literary and artistic heritages gradually are changed to suit for economic purposes rather than authentic values. For example, Quan Ho Bac Ninh is a famous traditional genre of music tends to be deeply changed to be suitable for younger audiences. Secondly, traditional dishes nowadays gradually don’t require to to follow a strict recipe to serve tourists so we will able to forget how our original dishes like. For instance, Bun Bo Hue is one of the most famous traditional dish in the Vietnamese cuisine which is well-known on over the world, however, restaurant chains nowadays has lost original favours and taste of this tasty dish.
On the other hand, I believe that although globalisation impacts negatively on traditions, it also contributes a significant part in maintaining native traditional heritages. It is undoubted that people can not know a particular ethnic community if their valuable traditions can not propagated to the remaining part of the world, in which commercialisation plays an important role through literature festivals or concert venue where traditional values are professional performed. In a practical perspective, in many places, indigenous residents have to maintain their special conventionalities to ensure fundamental living conditions. In other words, priceless tradtion can not survive unless native families have no stable financial base.
In conclusion, while there is a point of view that economic purpose is undermining cultural traditions due to aim at tourists instead of preserving them, I believe that commercialisation helps cultural values to spread out easier.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 148, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[5]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'used to making'.
Suggestion: used to making
...l heritages will be spoiled if they are used to make money, I would argue that commercialisa...
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: to
...s nowadays gradually don't require to to follow a strict recipe to serve tourist...
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Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[3]
Message: The verb 'can' requires base form of the verb: 'propagate'
Suggestion: propagate
...ty if their valuable traditions can not propagated to the remaining part of the world, in ...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ilies have no stable financial base. In conclusion, while there is a point of v...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1770.0 1615.20841683 110% => OK
No of words: 320.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53125 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23360649082 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 176.041082164 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.615625 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 562.5 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.5254165888 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.909090909 106.682146367 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0909090909 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.1818181818 7.06120827912 201% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167025139263 0.244688304435 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562214863866 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638761759781 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117753266111 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0665085897949 0.056905535591 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.2 13.0946893788 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 25.12 50.2224549098 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.0 11.3001002004 150% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.39 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.76 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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