Some people think that high school students should find a job immediately after graduation while others believe that they should continue to university Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people think that high school students should find a job immediately after graduation, while others believe that they should continue to university.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued that high school graduates ought to get a job instantly, whilst others believe that they should pursue tertiary education. Although entering the workforce straight after school offers many notable benefits, personally I believe that attending university is a more beneficial choice for students.
Opting for an early career path may lead to quicker life stability. Specifically, university graduates generally spend at least four years in college before finding a job. Meanwhile, highschool leavers can find a job immediately, saving on college tuition and offering more opportunities to earn a substantial income early on. For example, they can apply for jobs that do not require a formal certificate such as hair stylist, make-up artist or shop assistants. After four to five years, some even open their own shops or salons and can even have greater income than some college graduates who have just started working. Accordingly, early employment could decrease financial stress and allow for better financial management in youth.
However, I argue that pursuing tertiary education will offer students more significant opportunities to apply to major companies and a more financially stable life than people without any formal qualifications . It is true that they can approach deeper knowledge and are encouraged to enhance creative thinking and problem-solving skills while studying at university. These are essential qualities that most employers require their candidates to possess, especially for important positions with competitive salaries. For example, it is almost impossible to work as a public accountant or financial planner without a bachelor’s degree. Also, it would be significantly easier for them to run and develop their own business in the long run. Hence, students should pursue their studies at university in order to meet the increasing demands and gain more considerable achievements.

In conclusion, each approach has its important advantages for teenagers. However, I think they should keep on studying at the university in order to achieve a successful career in the long run.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, hence, however, if, may, so, while, at least, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1800.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 324.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55555555556 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01033486116 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.626543209877 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.4148957891 49.4020404114 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.5 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211926800892 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0653553165012 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.074084105814 0.0667982634062 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14195050829 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691187508513 0.056905535591 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 13.0946893788 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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