Although it is thought by some that technology ought to relate to hobbies, others believe that there is no need for this sort of interconnection. In my opinion, pastime should depend on the interests of individuals.
On the one hand, technology related hobbies are better for future job prospects, according to some. In other words, there are plenty of jobs which require the usage of computers or other similar technologies when a person already understands computers, it will, consequently, make working in information technology sector comparatively much easier to others. For example, students who solve computer programming related puzzles as a hobby are much likely to bag high paying jobs in reputed multinational companies. Furthermore, it is commonly believed that every other creative pastime requires some sort of electronic technology for instance music is majorly produced on computers and if one is a photography enthusiast knowledge of high-end digital cameras and photo-editing tools is a must.
On the other hand, it is often considered that it is better if the emphasis is given to traditional hobbies which do not require technology because they tend to have a positive impact on mental well being. Hobbies such as playing a musical instrument require full body coordination, which is very beneficial for the brain. Moreover, it makes one creative and widens the perspective. Another reason why non-technical hobby should be pursued is that it is advantageous for maintaining good health. Playing cricket, which most commonly played sport in my country, helps us to stay in good shape and protects from getting obese.
Finally, in my view, hobbies should be recreational in nature it should solely depend on the desires of individuals. People should take up those hobbies which give joy or escape from their monotonous life and it should be not something which should be done for a purpose in mind. if a hobby is taken with a motive it is not a hobby anymore, it becomes a job.
In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe it better if people chose a pastime which intrigues them as it should be the personal choice of the person.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, finally, furthermore, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, sort of, such as, in my opinion, in my view, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 13.1623246493 175% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1835.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16901408451 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95999109999 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.560563380282 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.1404859975 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.333333333 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6666666667 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226718346374 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.083043935526 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0682681072888 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126670729055 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0768421392894 0.056905535591 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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