Some people think personal happiness is directly related to economic success, while others believe this depends on other factors.
Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
It is often argued by some that, financial progression is the key concern of happiness in life. However, others believe that, many other things are inter connected to personnel joy. In my opinion, money alone could not provide life long pleasure, rather than the support of factors like family, social and health.
Supporters who pursued about economic enhancement would think money can buy everything we need including the ones own life pleasure. For instance, enjoyment from international travels, high quality shelter,foods and cloths, healthy lifestyles might leads to personnel happiness in either way. Economic success might improve social status, credibility and celebrity standards in the society, which may leads to inner confidence and self respect. Entrepreneurs, film stars, politicians could get more support and positions from various areas, therefore they would enjoy their life as based on their economic status. Many corporates could get more pleasant services and minimise time wastes which may achieved by the money they have.
Nevertheless, lots of other facts includes better health, peaceful family, emotional stability would flourish the joy of everyone life. People's can make happines through the such kind of things which money could not buy. A happy family would cherish the life of a man by children's growth, success, and emotional bonding between the members. Likewise, healthy body is a treasure of a common man to enjoy his life with handful of joy. The capacity to overcome difficult life situations, tragedies by emotional stability would leads to inner pleasure. Happiness could be made by one's life time experience and inborn capability which would be made by oneself.
To sum up, in my opinion, people can make inner pleasure and joy that money could not buy. Same way, everybody would enjoy their life and sense the feeling of happiness through many aspects which economic status could not provide. Meanwhile, financial success would pressurize more responsibility, commitments to the society rather than enjoying the happiest life ever.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, likewise, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, for instance, kind of, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 7.85571142285 293% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1760.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44891640867 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6581467124 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578947368421 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.5883029073 49.4020404114 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.529411765 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124401650228 0.244688304435 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0446929907095 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0378899444966 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0895570886252 0.151304729494 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409895488451 0.056905535591 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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