Some people think that shops should not be allowed to sell food or drinks that are scientifically proven to be bad for people's health.
Do you agree or disagree?
Many research have been conducted to prove that some food or drinks are harmful to people’s health, so there is an opinion that shops should be imposed a ban on selling these food and drinks. Personally, I agree with this opinion.
Today, by comparison with the past, people eat loads of unsafe food. There are several reasons to explain this problem. Firstly, the significant growth of the fast food industry changes eating habit of many people. Fast food contains a big proportion of fat, so if people eat too much fast food then they will become overweight or get some diseases of the blood. However, for many people, fast food is delicious and convenient, so instead of cooking, they choose buying fast food to save their time. Secondly, many food and drinks are influenced of chemical toxic. For example, vegetable is a kind of food that are mass production, so manufactures need to use certain chemicals to make them grow quickly. Chemicals also in use of manufacturing bottled beverages in a bid to keep drinks’s quality in good condition for a long time.
Implementing retrictions on selling harmful food and drinks is a good way to solve this problem. Harmful food cannot appear on the market anymore, so people have to buy healthy food because they have no choices. This may make people have a healthy diet and their health can be ameliorated. Besides, changing the eating habit also helps people to avoid getting diseases, so this may lessen the pressure that put on medical system.
In conclusion, I firmly hold the view that food and drink which have a bad effect on people’s health should not be allowed to sell.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much research', 'a good deal of research'.
Suggestion: Much research; A good deal of research
Many research have been conducted to prove that some ...
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Line 1, column 175, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this food' or 'these foods'?
Suggestion: this food; these foods
...hops should be imposed a ban on selling these food and drinks. Personally, I agree with th...
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Line 2, column 463, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to buy'.
Suggestion: to buy
...ent, so instead of cooking, they choose buying fast food to save their time. Secondly,...
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Line 2, column 510, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...fast food to save their time. Secondly, many food and drinks are influenced of chemi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, for example, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1366.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86120996441 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64045908202 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565836298932 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9324324228 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.0666666667 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7333333333 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334812509936 0.244688304435 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116350808083 0.084324248473 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.109562085061 0.0667982634062 164% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266450366831 0.151304729494 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106293724376 0.056905535591 187% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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