Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people think young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as car mechanics or builders etc to serve society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, there are many paths that could be chosen by students after graduating high school. I agree that looking for a job in the service sphere has some perks in a few aspects, I would contend that applying straight to university after finishing high school brings more benefits.
On the one hand, there are several reasons why school leavers should start working rather than going to the university. In terms of career, people who have a job sooner would have more experience which is one of the essential elements in the field requiring practical knowledge. Moreover, by not taking further education, they will be able to avoid college debt or not having to spend several years without practicing in their ambition job. In some cases, this way may be suitable with many students who don’t have financial ability.
On the other hand, I firmly believe that becoming a tertiary student could have more advantages in the long term. In higher education, students will be able to have a good grasp of their occupation and other necessary skills to become professional laborers. Furthermore, many careers require employees to have academic qualifications and specific knowledge such as teachers, scientists and so on. For example, a doctor has to be well-informed with the medical profession to care for patients and do surgery.In fact, this only could be done by having a process learning in universities or in higher education and hardly acquired through practical experiences. Especially in the competitive job market today, employers tend to have more attention to employees who have master degrees compared to who do not have.
In conclusion, although I agree that being a worker after completing high school brings several benefits such as gaining more experiences, I strongly believe that continuing to have further education would guarantee many benefits including academic knowledge and skills.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, so, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in some cases, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1603.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 306.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2385620915 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.798921834 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578431372549 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 55.2259877433 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.583333333 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 20.7667163134 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0833333333 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.106780432907 0.244688304435 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0431517407855 0.084324248473 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0283186431775 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.065815012615 0.151304729494 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031870998892 0.056905535591 56% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.41 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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