Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives.
Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?
Most of people want to be famous because of the fortune celebrities usually earn. Commonly these people are unhappy even having everything what money can afford; and I totally agree with this statement. Also, I would argue that there are two main reasons for this.
There is a tendency to think that money can bring happiness automatically, however this is a terrible mistake. Then, the first reason why I agree with that idea is because happiness is not equal to fame and expensive products such as cars and luxurious houses. So people are trying to reach completeness and happiness just purchasing these stuffs; and they are failing to fulfill their expectation with external things.
The second reason why I think that statement is correct is that they pay a high price to become famous and celebrities. Being known by everyone is a tought challenge. They are recognized everywhere and all media are always talking about their personal lives. Also, people around the world are accompanying their choices and troubles. A helpful example for this would be the soccer player Neymar and his girlfriend Bruna, the whole country knows when they broke up, or when they are thinking in marriage, or whatever they do.
So I really think that lose your own privacy truly contributes to make them feel terribly unhappy. Despite of their expensively life and the huge fortune that they are making being famous, most of these people have struggles with their sense of happiness. Unfortunately, some of them are even glad with their lives and also have some serious depression issues.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'Most of', you should use 'the' ('Most of the people') or simply say ''Most people''.
Suggestion: Most of the people; Most people
Most of people want to be famous because of the fortun...
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Line 1, column 266, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...at there are two main reasons for this. There is a tendency to think that money ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, really, second, so, then, i think, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 24.0 41.998997996 57% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1320.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01901140684 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54003210079 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.600760456274 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 410.4 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.3485860545 49.4020404114 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.2857142857 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7857142857 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.28571428571 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216377857846 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069171536297 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042604802892 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128586022508 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574035338922 0.056905535591 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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