Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results while others believe that it is important to reward students who show improvement Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people think that school should reward students who show the best academic results while others believe that it is important to reward students who show improvement.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are who believe that it is important to recompense students who get good grades, conversely others say it is important to remunerate those who show progress. In my point of view, I would argue that praising students who show improvements is more reasonable.

On one hand, according to many responsibles of schools, they prefer to encourage outstanding students, because that will motivate them to work hard, and work for the highest scores, also by approaching this method will allow students to nurture theirs abilities. For instance, my secondary school select those who get high marks to take them to national competitions.

On other hand, it is worth considering that rewarding students who show progress has a good impact on the individuals, to begin with, encourage slowly learner to make more efforts to gain best level, also make them feel the sense of fulfilment, second benefit, is that could give them the equal chance to receive awards, instead of feeling disappointed. The most significant example, is my niece, she is a slowly learner, her teacher motivate her each time she does well, so this kept her making efforts on her studies.

To sum up, I believe that the main solution that make students motivated is rewarding, and it seems to me that it is better to reward who show progress to encourage them to get a good marks.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, conversely, if, second, so, well, for instance, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 10.4138276553 19% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1123.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 228.0 315.596192385 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92543859649 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 4.20363070211 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74925141606 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 342.0 506.74238477 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 16.0721442886 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 32.0 20.2975951904 158% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 83.4006802693 49.4020404114 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.428571429 106.682146367 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.5714285714 20.7667163134 157% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.1428571429 7.06120827912 158% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.281328027079 0.244688304435 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.146247750022 0.084324248473 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.108455463917 0.0667982634062 162% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187342465247 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118518346965 0.056905535591 208% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.46 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 10.1190380762 146% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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