Some think that governments should support retired people financially while others believe they should take care of themselves.
Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It has been argued that governments are responsible for helping retired people financially. However, some others believe that this burden is on the shoulder of themselves. In this essay I will discuss the both sides and elaborate why I generally agree with the former statement.
The first group states that seniors ,who complete their service to the state, are old enough to start a new carrier. They do their part in the society and it is their time to stay away from any stress regarding financial problems. They are deprived of their family for a long time because they dedicate almost all of their gold moments to their work. These people deserve to spend a vast amount of time on their own desires. In addition, their physical status is inappropriate to work more. Actually, it should be accepted that their body is not as strong as when they were younger. For this reason, they cannot work for a long time with heavy pressure and if they do so, they may encounter countless ailments such as cardiovascular diseases. Besides, the risk of occupational Injuries increases in worker who are over 60.
However, other people believe they are like others in the society and should work in every stage of their life to meet their need. If they cannot countinue their former job because of any reason, they should change it to an easier one. The reason for that is governments are unable to tolerate the financial burden of pensioners and should spend this money on some more crucial parts to rectify infrastructural problems. Furthermore, by passage of time, being in the home without any purposeful job is becoming monotonous and boring for them. Working help their mind maintain its wellbeing and decrease the incidence of some brain-related illness such as Alzheimer. So, instead of allocating money in supporting them, it is better for governments to prepare plenty appropriate jobs for them to encourage them to work smoothly after their retirement.
In conclusion, I belive government should allot certain money to partially support retired workers, besides, prepare some suitable jobs to their ages. Therefore, they can meet their financial needs and stay healthy.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 36, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nt. The first group states that seniors ,who complete their service to the state,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1813.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 361.0 315.596192385 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02216066482 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35889894354 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66919895215 2.80592935109 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 176.041082164 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.551246537396 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 559.8 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.2582871734 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.4210526316 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.9879759519 201% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205709229322 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0714496582853 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554211009405 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.151255796234 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0367177500472 0.056905535591 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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