Do you agree or disagree that a celebrity should set a good example for young people?
Since the begginer of the world, it is possible to see that most animals and all humans learn how they need behavier using as a model the examples from the others being like they. This behavior can be more apparent in childrens, but also can occurs in teenagers and adults.Uncounsciously, when we see others people doing something, we start to think that it is normal and correct, and also that we need to do the same, to fit perfectly in the society. For example, we usually learn how to comunicate, which clothes we need to use and which behaviours we need to have using as example other being like us.
We can check this behavior when people stars to use the same clothes and accesories as the actors in some new film or novel is using. They do this because they want to feel as an integrant of the society, so they see the examples and try to reproduce.
There are psycologist which attemps that we are an average of the close people that are next us and that we are often following in the media. Thinking about it, couldn't be a good idea if the celebreties doesn't have good examples, or starts to do wrong thinks. As the celebreties are important peoples, which are commounly exposure to everybody they can use this to influence people. A great idea for they is to give good examples, showing for others people what might do in many tipy of situations, having ethical behaviors and correct decisions. Doing this they will likely influce the society to reproduce the same. It can enhance the chances of a resilient world, turning a better enviroment to live togheter.
Concluding my idea, it is much important that celebrities should give good examples as they have a lot of influence in the whole word. Many peoples will follow they and probably will attemp to do the same.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1463.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.58620689655 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60834262012 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504702194357 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 464.4 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.6003584229 63% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2001909518 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.538461538 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5384615385 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.30769230769 5.45110844103 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173860171532 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.069215089803 0.076458572812 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542783174798 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12461322016 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0512042744754 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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