Children are the future of the world, and for this reason should be treated with care. They are all very susceptible to any type of influence, and to learn things, either good or bad. Therefore, it is important for famous people, such as celebrities, to stand as good models for them.
Firstly, it is necessary to understand that not every kid have the same background. Many children grows without a good role model inside their own home, and this can affect negatively their lives. When they don't have such models, they aspire to be like someone that they see or heard about, in many cases a celebrity. If this celebrity acts wrong, the children may think that this is what sucessful people do, and can replicate it.
However, if the situation is the opposite, and the celebritie act the best that they can, the children can grow to be a better citizen. For example, my generation grew watching Harry Potter movies, were the main character is shown as a good guy and chooses the righteous paths. Its actor is a role model a lot of people of my age, and they may replicate its bad habbits, such as drinking and smoking.
Finnaly, society need to also think about this subject more deeply. It is useless to demand from celebrities a certain behaviour when we are the ones that make their fame. If we think that an actor or someone is being a bad influence in the society we shouldn't keep buying or incentivating them to act as such. Also, it is important to think that we also hold a part of the responsibility, and everyone need to act accordingly. Perhaps, the children will not see an actor as a model, but the local shoper, a known police officer, or even a neighbour.
Therefore, it is important to demand from celebrities the correct behaviour, mainly if it is towards children. Their influence can be bigger than what they think, and they can negatively impact the lives of others if they don't act correctly. But, it is also necessary to understand our own responsibility as a society, and also act as we should, mainly near kids, as they will be the ones taking the decisions in the future.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, so, therefore, for example, such as, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 52.1666666667 61% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1726.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 376.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59042553191 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60022611929 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502659574468 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 618.680645161 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 25.1418199642 48.9658058833 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 95.8888888889 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 5.45110844103 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103376506952 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0367001058933 0.076458572812 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0424183013994 0.0737576698707 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684285411988 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0481743382094 0.0645574589148 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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