Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
It goes without saying that in this competitive world where we live, people are struggling with various problems and have to work in order to improve the quality of their lives. In this regard, some people believe that they choose a secure job whether they like it or no, others hold the opposite view. Personally, I firmly concur with the former group. To substantiate my point of view, two significant reasons are explored in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, these days, living expenses are increasing so that people have to work that is opened. To clarify, in this world, people’s needs are increasing, and most of them are extremely expensive. Therefore, people have to make much money to pay cash to buy what they want. Making money is the foremost purpose, even if individuals do a job out of their interest and internal satisfaction. Also, finding a desirable job can take much time, and even there might not be any guarantee to find a desirable job in the future. As a result, if a person has the opportunity to get a secure job, he should definitely seize it. For example, my cousin is a tailer. He tells me that he wanted to be an accountant and thought this work would satisfy him. However, he had to be a tailer because of his family expenditure and safety of this job.
Secondly, people maybe do not know of which job really can satisfy them, so they probably are misled. To specific, some persons always think that their dream job is only work in which they will become successful and satisfied. So, they persist in finding that work rather than use available careers, and after a while, when they cannot flourish in the desired career, they go back and take another job and find this job as true love. For instance, I liked painting as a job and tried hard to be a famous painter, but I couldn’t. Then, I had to work as a designer, and now I love my job.
In conclusion, taking two reasons mentioned into account, I strongly believe that people do work any job even they do not like it. This is because not only do living expenses are increasing, but also individuals sometimes are misled about their true love job.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 103, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hat people have to work that is opened. To clarify, in this world, people’s needs ...
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Line 3, column 539, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...esirable job in the future. As a result, if a person has the opportunity to get a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1767.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6015625 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5371253294 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 618.680645161 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.6482858611 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.35 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348775651874 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100497013113 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.051781568816 0.0737576698707 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21178659668 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513471373791 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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