Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
It is crystal clear that finding appropriate jobs have played an important role in humans' lives in recent centuries. Many people hold the opinion that if they are able to have a safe job, they should take it as soon as possible, and they should not wait for a better job. I, personally speaking, agree with this opinion. The reasons to substantiate my view are elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, having a job with safe conditions in order to earn money is a vital issue in today's life. The financial conditions has become more and more difficult in recent years. Therefore, people, espicially in my country, prefer to imidiately find a job with a reasonable salary to provide essential facilities for their lives. For instance, my cousin is a mechanical engineer. Last year, he wanted to buy a new house. His old house was very cramped and inconvenient. Although he had a dream to find a job position in a famous factory named Mapna, he decided to be hired in a very small organization. His job had secure conditions. Although, he could not find his dream job, at least, he could afford to by a new house. If he had waited for a more satisfying job, he would not have bought a new house.
Second, the people need to imidiately find a job to improve their mental health, and therefore, they prefer to go to a work with stable conditions rather than to wait for a dream job position. These days, people are under serious strains and stresses of moder life. Having a job can halp them to improve their self confident. By being ambitious and wating for a better job position, they people may miss available job opportunities, which can be very important to decrease stresses in the people's lives. My own experience can clearly demonstrate this. I was graduated from a university last year. At first, I really wanted to find a job as a mechanical designer by using a software named Solidwork. However, I could not find this job. I prefered to wait for six month. But, after this time, I felt that I was not improtant for society, and this was very annoying. Additionally, I was under a severe stresses because my family expected me to have a salary. At last, I prefered to go to a company that, of course, the job position was not my favorite one. However, I have felt really better from that time.
To conclude, having considered the mentioned reasons, I believe that people prefer to find a job with stable conditios imidiately rather than to wait for their dream job. This is because they need money to provide their essential needs, and also, they can imorove their mental health conditions.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 131, Rule ID: AGREEMENT_SENT_START[2]
Message: You should probably use 'have', 'haven'.
Suggestion: have; haven
...n todays life. The financial conditions has become more and more difficult in recen...
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Line 3, column 763, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...nd this job. I prefered to wait for six month. But, after this time, I felt that I wa...
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Line 3, column 900, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'stress'?
Suggestion: stress
...ing. Additionally, I was under a severe stresses because my family expected me to have a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, may, really, second, so, therefore, at least, for instance, of course, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2156.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64655172414 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67238250816 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469827586207 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 9.59856630824 260% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.7811315884 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.3448275862 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.96551724138 5.45110844103 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356512769178 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0926370234297 0.076458572812 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875419236218 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.240289094112 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0389693246336 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.39 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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