Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.
Having a job is the most essential need in contemporary life. Many people thus propose that it is reasonable to do a job that is a safety aspect of raising money. For they see it as an opportunity to afford living costs. While undoubtedly having a job plays an important role in life, I disagree people undergo the job in non-ordinary circumstances. Rather, they engage in satisfying jobs. My point of view is based on mental health and economic aspects, which I will explore in the passages.
From a mental health perspective, career satisfaction causes relief and calm. The ones who have a desirable job, are saturated mentally. This is supported in a recent study conducted at Oxford University, in which they claim people obsess an arbitrary job, Amigdala area of the brain where is responsible for anxiety is impressed effectively, thus, they experience relation and mental health increases.
Economically speaking, job satisfaction causes more efficiency and positive feedback. The ones who have desirable jobs motivate to have useful output and attempt to improve their responsibilities. My experience is a compelling example of this. During my graduation, I had an opportunity to do a short-time job at Google company as a programmer. It was not permanent but was my dream job. I worked hard on algorithms because I liked to solve challenging problems. Eventually, I could run a program that was beneficial for the company financially. Had not been satisfied I with the job, I would not have achieved the way leading a lot of money.
To sum up, job satisfaction is a key factor in our career. This is because it increases mental health and because it eventuates economic exploitation.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 77
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Only people who earn a lot of money are successful Use specific reasons and details to support your answer 75
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is more important for students to study art and literature than it is to study math and science Provide reasons and examples to support your opinion 73
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Playing computer games is a waste of time Children shouldn t be allowed to play them 81
- It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours 76
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 208, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to live'.
Suggestion: to live
...they see it as an opportunity to afford living costs. While undoubtedly having a job p...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, thus, while, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1977.66487455 72% => OK
No of words: 281.0 407.700716846 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04982206406 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.48103885553 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15210095473 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576512455516 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 618.680645161 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.1789140209 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.6842105263 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.7894736842 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.84210526316 5.45110844103 34% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.287601331728 0.236089414692 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.085689388883 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623361014521 0.0737576698707 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163090556303 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0839472452578 0.0645574589148 130% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 11.7677419355 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.42 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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