Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better to have broad knowledge of many academic subjects than to specialize in one specific subject.
Knowledge is an inextricable part of human's life. Although having knowledge in every filed would be a good thing, is it really accessible? In my opinion, not only should people work together but also they need to trust each other; in other word, I am a staunch adherent in being specialized in one subject which the rational behind my statement will be elucidated in ensuing paragraphs.
To commence with, people need to participate in common works and trust each other. In this order, they will not need to have knowledge in all academic subjects if people can trust in each other. However, It comes to our mind that what is the role of trust here, hence, this example will vividly shed light on what I mean above. About two years ago, my father started to build a firm and he looked for some employees who were appropriate for the firm. Firstly he employed whom had broad knowledge in every field and hired some other workers with ordinary knowledge in addition, after a month, other workers made complains about the man who done everything without consult with the others and his works led to other employees held movement and did not work. Therefore, my father figured out the reason the educated man did not consult with the others was that he did not have trust in them.
Another reason that deserve to discuss is that the more people try to have extend knowledge in any fields, the more shallow are their knowledge. Actually, in my opinion, when people just want to know everything they did not go deep down in subjects and just can learn few things about it, then they let go of it and try to know something else like this. Recent studies illustrate that people who seek for knowing everything in shallow way, not only do they feel frustrated in their works but also cannot satisfy themselves. Hence, had people specialized in their filed, they would be feel satisfaction deep down inside themselves.
To sum up with, being specialized is more worthwhile that having knowledge in many academic subjects, in order to taking part in group activities, relying on each other and learn the specialized field more accurate. Consequently, I suggest that people study just one field or two fields at least with consideration to learn everything about chosen field/fields.
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...ration to learn everything about chosen field/fields.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, however, if, look, really, so, then, therefore, while, at least, i mean, in addition, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1886.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 392.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8112244898 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44960558625 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53215344568 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520408163265 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 574.2 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.6723855378 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.733333333 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1333333333 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.2 5.45110844103 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172058528552 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0607653879853 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491876464513 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111143689901 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311293208635 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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