Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
In this modern era, as technology evolves, people are more exposed to advertisements through the television and various social media, which increase their awareness of celebrities' lifestyles. The controversial question which has always caused heated debates is whether juveniles are more influenced by famous entertainers and athletes than older people or not. Some people possess the conviction that celebrities have had an impact on older people as much as youth. I nevertheless hold an alternative perspective and subscribe to the idea that the notion of stars is more significant for younger people. Further discussion on this topic can be boiled down to a couple of upcoming reasons below.
The first momentous point which bears in mind is that, on the one hand, juveniles are more awkward than older people, and they have fewer experiences to rely on to form the base of their life, and on the other hand, they have more inclined to make a hero in their mind to follow. As a result, they have perpetually looked for role models to follow their opinion and ground their conviction as the step-stone of their own life. To shed light on this issue, when I was a teenager, I genuinely enthusiastic about mathematics. So I was seeking someone who impresses me. When I found Professor Maryam Mirzakhani_ the winner of Fields medal_, I always watched her interview and speeches on YouTube, and I tried to imitate her; what sources she read, how she thinks about different problems, and even how much she sleeps during twenty-four hours. My parents, nonetheless, believed that everyone had better finds their own manner and do not imitate the method of others. I, however, think hadn't I seen those speeches from her, I would not be such motived today.
The other exquisite point that should be mentioned is that juveniles are more exposed to advertisements than older adults due to their inclination toward surfing social media and seeking someone who has attractive ideas. Moreover, since the essence of advertisement is attracting younger people and their program has, fundamentally, been designed according to youth's favorites, older people would not be enthusiastic toward them. Statistical research has demonstrated that more than eighty-five percent of social media and television programs have contents due to juvenile's tact. More importantly, it should be taken into account that since older people are more conservative. Also, they are not daring enough to adventure themselves, even if there were some entertainer or celebrities which has acted according to their age requirement, they cannot risk and accept their opinion or imitate them.
Contemplating the aforementioned reasons leads us to the conclusion that the opinion of the celebrities has more profound impacts on youth than older people that are more conservative and have fruitful experiences that provide no demand for following role models and adapt their life according to their opinions. Is it reasonable for a seventy years old man to pursue the idea of celebrities? Or is it irrational?
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 981, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: hadn't
...the method of others. I, however, think hadnt I seen those speeches from her, I would...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, thus, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2574.0 1977.66487455 130% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21052631579 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89678871816 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 212.727598566 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53036437247 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 809.1 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 78.3568758948 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.7 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.7 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.45 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284464244464 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814368548498 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741923675496 0.0737576698707 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186531751995 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605894471237 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 11.7677419355 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 86.8835125448 152% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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