Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Submitted by Dozer on Sun, 12/24/2017 - 14:15

These days, people spend a lot of time at work and it is important for us to be happy with our jobs. However, I personally think that it is better to have a secure job rather than waiting for the one that would be more enjoyable. There are a few reasons why I hold this stance.
First of all, a stable job helps to a person feel financially protected. People, who have children are responsible for them and have to provide them with a safe home and healthy food. To pay for this, parents need to be employed. My own experience is a compelling example of this. For y husband and me, our kids are our first priority and when we make any decisions in life, we always think how they can affect our children. In this way, when recently my spouse lost his well-paid job, he was looking for new opportunities. Unfortunately, he could not find a company, which would pay him the same salary. However, he did not hesitate and took an offer form a firm, which guaranteed him a stable income, so we could afford to pay our house lone and school bills with no delay. By doing that, my husband insured shelter, education, and meals for our family. This example illustrates my argument.
Secondly, an employment that looks not satisfying at the very beginning can turn to a start of an astonishing career. Nobody knows what exactly is going to happen in the future, and life sometimes is full of great surprises. For example, after graduating a pharmacy school I could not find a job in a retail pharmacy, which would be close to my house, so I had to start working in a pharmacy, which was thirty minutes away from my neighborhood. I was frustrated because I did not have a personal vehicle and had to use a train. However, after four months of the employment, I was offered a position of a pharmacy manager and got a chance to move no the next step in my career growth. Th that end, sometimes jobs that seem not perfect for us can actually help us to excel.
To conclude, I strongly believe that when people get a job opportunity, they should appreciate that even if is not really what they are looking for. This is because it will provide their families with a necessary income to live, and can contribute to a successful future.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 653, Rule ID: FROM_FORM[4]
Message: Did you mean 'from'?
Suggestion: from
..., he did not hesitate and took an offer form a firm, which guaranteed him a stable i...
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Line 3, column 646, Rule ID: NOW[2]
Message: Did you mean 'now' (=at this moment) instead of 'no' (negation)?
Suggestion: now
...armacy manager and got a chance to move no the next step in my career growth. Th t...
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Line 4, column 272, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can contribute to a successful future.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, look, really, second, secondly, so, well, for example, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.45098039216 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60752983523 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553921568627 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.6826045279 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4761904762 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4285714286 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.85714285714 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235172677855 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670121133647 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0708708695747 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164685200408 0.150856017488 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0746845786684 0.0645574589148 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.53 10.9000537634 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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