Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents’ jobs than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents’ job.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, it's established beyond the doubt that the job is one of the critical subjects in the life and their importance is inevitable. An old Persian author states that "the role of the job never eliminated but the amount of their role has changed during the time". As matter of the fact, opting for the appropriate job are more important for children than the similarities to their parents' job. After regarding the different factors into consideration, I totally support this idea that I do not agree with this statements and in the following, I will elaborate more details to explains my reasons.
The first and the most exquisite point need to be mentioned is that children always need to be relaxed in the context of their job which will choose in the future, thus, if parents try to persuade their children to continue their job in the most of the time not only do not have positive effect but alter the children's interest. By way of example, a plethora of psychologists are of the opinion that if parents want their children to become successful in the future, they should enhance them to flourish in their ability and interest. Therefore, it is not really considered that children which have similar jobs to their parents are better. In this era, parents can share their experiences with their children and help them to opt for the appropriate job which directly has a positive effect on their future.
There is another factor that deserves some words is that children should be aware of the all aspects of each job such as the economic level, amount of wage, the structure, and their interest and then decide about it. According to the survey which has been conducted by experts in Teheran university demonstrated that children which choose their courses in the university and then inter to the work are more successful than others which could not analyze their job. Some parents force their children to continue their job without pay attention to their ability in their course, this is really detrimental for them because they not only have any information about that job but they will not be active and eager in the work, so the rate will be reduced.
To put it all in nutshell, by considering all of the aforementioned reasons which have been categorized above, I am not agree with this idea that children should opt for jobs similar to their parents, they should be aware of their ability and interest and then decide about the job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, really, regarding, so, then, therefore, thus, such as, by and large
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2045.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 426.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80046948357 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54310108192 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55364645741 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 212.727598566 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.441314553991 0.524837075471 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 35.0 20.1344086022 174% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 67.9360401816 48.9658058833 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.416666667 100.406767564 170% => OK
Words per sentence: 35.5 20.6045352989 172% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.443861530526 0.236089414692 188% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.203172811011 0.076458572812 266% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0843325838106 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303918724327 0.150856017488 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0576558915858 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 11.7677419355 161% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.41 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.0 10.0537634409 159% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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