Imagine that you plan to donate money to charity to help people in need. If you could give money to only one type of charitable organization, which one of the following would you choose and why?
- An organization that provides food and housing to people in need
- An organization that gives people money to start their own small business
- An organization that provides medical care to people in need.
Of those issues that have considered governments and public throughout the world, charitable activities are one of the most prominent. In this respect, many people tend to donate money to impoverished families to be met their need such as food, housing, medical care, to name but a few. However, some others stand at the other extreme, holding the opinion that the donation should bring needy people into line, which help them to initiate their own business. Yet to the best of my knowledge, I side with the latter idea. The following paragraphs lend credence to this view.
First and foremost, public donations should be diverted toward learning people in need to launch their own startup, cultivating them to get independent of receiving charitable aids. To elucidate more on this issue, they are taught how to earn regular money, thereby improving their living standards. Suffice to say, they are inspired to be self-employed, instead of being attached to voluntary financial aids. It has been acknowledged that individuals receiving constant payment tend to be dependent in a long-run to those charitable donations, for they have less motivation to stand on their own feet. Correspondingly, loads of money would be spending extravagantly to meet people’s expectations. In fact, donations can be used for more noteworthy measures such as discovering a panacea for hard-to-cure diseases and also providing free-of-charge medical health for all strata of society. Therefore, the more money dedicated to initiating a business for people in desperate need, the more independent individuals will be in the future.
What is more, it is more likely that individuals launching their own business will be a part of the charity which they were one of its members once upon a time. That is to say, they will show sympathy and goodwill more straightforward than others not being suffered from poverty. Specifically, their donations will not be superficial, transient, and ad hoc since they are acquainted with the demerits of impoverishment. According to Maslow’s’ hierarchy of needs, those needs for food, shelter, and healthcare are among the basic. After these targets are attained, people tend to higher aspirations, self-actualization. One of the redeeming features of these survived individuals is that expanding their startup, they are more willing to hire in need people to teach them how to fish, not just waiting for receiving donations.
Having considered all these values, charitable aids should be given to impoverished families so as to launch their own business. This is because they can get independent of financial aids in the near future; along with they can be a part of the charitable activities since they had incurred difficulties in times gone by.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 73, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to people'
Suggestion: to people
...ions should be diverted toward learning people in need to launch their own startup, cu...
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Line 4, column 94, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...hould be given to impoverished families so as to launch their own business. This is beca...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, as to, in fact, such as, what is more, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 52.1666666667 134% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2340.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29411764706 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13364669523 2.67179642975 117% => OK
Unique words: 233.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527149321267 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 723.6 618.680645161 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6756370778 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.0 100.406767564 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147583543534 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0515014327121 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0414827324934 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979905197194 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0513939335165 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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