Importance of computers
Many teachers look for ways to improve their interactions with students and to better the study conditions. Natural catastrophies destroy papers, but it is very unusual for data saved in technological clouds to be destroyed. The waste of school materials is something that students try endlessly to avoid. Computers have completely changed the way students learn and because of them the risk of losing data has been reduced. The computer is an important innovation, for it helps students learn effectively, and they allow people to communicate with their relative for low costs.
First, computers have improved education. Great education is still restrained to some countries. In Sub-Saharian Africa, the majority of countries do not provide effective education. People are forced to move away from their countries to get educated. Computers allow students to stay in their respective countries and receive education via internet. In Rwanda, for example, there is a school, Kepler, which is an online courses based school and collaborate with the an American University. Kepler Students learn via internet on a daily basis, and they are successful in their communities. Computers are important tools to facilitate education because they allow people to study whereever they want.
Second, computers have lowered the cost of international communications. Therefore, they have improved communication. Due to the improvement of computers, social media plateforms were brought. For example, Facebook, a social media that help people from all over the world to communicate allows students who are studying away from their family to remain in touch with their relatives. Some students experience stress or lose boundaries with their siblings when they stay away from them for a long period of time. Facebook had become vital to keep tight relationships among people, and it may not have been created had the computer been introduced first.
In conclusion, computers have helped students to study efficiently, and people keep in touch with their relatives because of computers' derived technology. Students have the opportunity to access higher education in their countries in their countries. Moreover, they easily communicate with their siblings even if they are so far away from them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 423, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'course'?
Suggestion: course
...is a school, Kepler, which is an online courses based school and collaborate with the a...
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Line 2, column 465, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'an' is left.
Suggestion: the; an
...urses based school and collaborate with the an American University. Kepler Students le...
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Line 3, column 498, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...hen they stay away from them for a long period of time. Facebook had become vital to keep tigh...
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Line 4, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...even if they are so far away from them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, moreover, second, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 352.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92503702871 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528409090909 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.0328478271 48.9658058833 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22727272727 5.45110844103 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183859533226 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0626430089028 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0897235654512 0.0737576698707 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128058263581 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0409411861465 0.0645574589148 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 58.1214874552 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 10.9000537634 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 86.8835125448 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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