Having a broad networking will help people, especially young people, to be successful in their personal and professional life. Given that notion, some believe that it is more beneficial to make new friends to be successful in our life rather than keeping the old ones. I personally hold the opposite viewpoint, thinking that keeping old friends is significantly more important helping people to progress in their career and in their private life. In this essay, this perspective will be argued.
To start with, old friends are presumably more reliable than new acquaintances when it comes for finding jobs. Old friends generally know our personalities and potentials. After graduation from university, having a firm and reliable relationship will go a long way towards employment. Old friend usually care more compared to the new ones. I remember a personal experience here. Around 1 year ago, I was struggling finding an appropriate job which would be in accordance with my qualities and educations. After months of seeking job, I was only successful in being employed in some casual jobs. Accidently, one of my old friends whom I have known him since 10 years ago contacted me and offered me a very related job. He helped me towards the interview process which finally led to my employment. Further he pointed out that he had found out about my career issue through Linkedin website and instantly tried to solve my issue. As this example has showed, old friend are usually more helpful especially in critical conditions than the new ones.
In addition, when it comes to personal matters old friends are usually more supportive. They know our characteristics well and when we are disappointed they are often more sympathy. If we have some issues with our parent, old friends will step forward to address our problem by listening to us and trying to talk with our parent, since they know our backgrounds, our thought and our feelings. When we are sick they show sympathy and want to assist us to recover soon. In financial circumstances, old friend are reliable source to request as they can trust us more than new friends. Old friend are more trustworthy and we can reveal some of our personal problems to them and be sure that they keep all of our secrets with themselves. Regularly, new friends cannot be reliable to disclose all of our thoughts as they probably would not be real friend. People every now and then have chosen their old friend in emergency circumstances over their new friends.
In conclusion, old friends show more sympathy, be more companion and are more supportive than new friends. Without any doubt, we prefer to call our old friend when we need money, when we feel depressed or when we have some arguments with our parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...life rather than keeping the old ones. I personally hold the opposite viewpoint, ...
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Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to find'.
Suggestion: to find
...re. Around 1 year ago, I was struggling finding an appropriate job which would be in ac...
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...personal matters old friends are usually more supportive. They know our character...
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Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...obably would not be real friend. People every now and then have chosen their old friend in emergen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, so, then, well, in addition, in conclusion, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2294.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 465.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93333333333 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64369019777 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75096216048 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503225806452 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Interrogative: 3.0 0.994623655914 302% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8437691271 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.76 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.8 5.45110844103 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206900698264 0.236089414692 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0751561895707 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723080134089 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141328495544 0.150856017488 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0125754579957 0.0645574589148 19% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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