TPO-14 - Independent Writing Task
I agree with the statemet that people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries. I am inclined to believe that It is a question of nationality. There are two reasons and examples to support my opinion.
First of all, from my perspective, traveling in their own country people learn more about their nacionality and culture than traveling to foreign countries. For example, my country, Brazil, have a extense area and twenty-six states, It is much culture, forms of speak, diferents eats, diferents colonizations, and other things. I believe that this is a form to knowledge of their nation and all diverse culture and pratics presents on diferentes regions and places. However, the price to travel by air-plane to other state sometimes are more expensive than travel to other country. This countribue to people do not been benefit about traveling in their own coutry.
In the second place, from my point of view, people benefit themself and their country thaveling to itself. What form? Helping the economy of their countries to move around itself. Visit other states, we have a pratic of buy presents to a parent, stay in a motel for a days, eat on restaurants, to go to parks, and many other things. All this help to country in a point economic, and a good economy, people can buy more than in a period of bad economy. For example, It is much saw that American people have a pratic of travel through their states, and I believe that this contribue to United States be a power world knowledge in all Earth and be na atractive to people of other countries travel to USA.
In conclusion, there are my reasons to support my opinion about the statement “people benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries”.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
.... For example, my country, Brazil, have a extense area and twenty-six states, It ...
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Line 5, column 267, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a day' or simply 'days'?
Suggestion: a day; days
...esents to a parent, stay in a motel for a days, eat on restaurants, to go to parks, an...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 602, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[6]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'power world knowledge'.
Suggestion: power world knowledge
...that this contribue to United States be a power world knowledge in all Earth and be na atractive to peo...
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Line 5, column 703, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eople of other countries travel to USA. In conclusion, there are my reasons to s...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, so, for example, in conclusion, first of all, in the second place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1510.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 309.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88673139159 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71352227748 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 141.0 212.727598566 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.456310679612 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 469.8 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2404975559 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.857142857 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0714285714 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.236089414692 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.076458572812 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0737576698707 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.150856017488 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0645574589148 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 86.8835125448 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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