TPO-27 - Independent Writing Task
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be
more satisfying.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There has been much argue about career choice of people. One group of people believe that people must choose the job which are secure. ON the other hand, others assert that they must follow their demand and choose job that satisfying them. According to my experience and actual observation about actual life have lead me to be agree with second group of people. I have many reason to prove my point.
The first and foremost consequential reason is that all the people must follow their dream and what they like. if they want to have good life and be happy in their life must create their future based on their demand, interest and happiness. if they choose their work just for it good income or good position but not happy during the work time, in fact they waste their time in the life and they can’t be happy in their future life. they must choose their field in the university and then work hard to specialized in their field and then choose their field based on their interest.
Another point that springing to mind is that, if people choose their future career based on their interest, they always work hard to be successful in their job and try to create new idea and new project to took their dean attention. And if they show the good performance in the work place and have good idea about improve the company, they would give good position in the firm or company. they know the good position have very good opportunity like good income, and they could be respectable person in their career.
To sum it all up by taking all the detail into consideration I think peoples must choose their job based on their interest and demand rather than secure job. if they like the works they work hard to improve their job and create successful and happy life for themselves.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 215, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to job'
Suggestion: to job
...hey must follow their demand and choose job that satisfying them. According to my e...
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Line 1, column 370, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun reason seems to be countable; consider using: 'many reasons'.
Suggestion: many reasons
...ree with second group of people. I have many reason to prove my point. The first and for...
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Line 3, column 112, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
... follow their dream and what they like. if they want to have good life and be happ...
^^
Line 3, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...n their demand, interest and happiness. if they choose their work just for it good...
^^
Line 3, column 438, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...n't be happy in their future life. they must choose their field in the universi...
^^^^
Line 5, column 390, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: They
...e good position in the firm or company. they know the good position have very good o...
^^^^
Line 7, column 159, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...rest and demand rather than secure job. if they like the works they work hard to i...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, then, i think, in fact, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1977.66487455 74% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.59247648903 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.14431519978 2.67179642975 80% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 212.727598566 67% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445141065831 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 441.0 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6426002049 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.642857143 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7857142857 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92857142857 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147725221324 0.236089414692 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0728719772146 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420807737243 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122035959128 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0496401587627 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.76 8.01818996416 84% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 86.8835125448 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.