In your country, is there more need for land to be left in its natural condition or is there more need for land to be developed for housing and industry?
In order to protect the species, to keep the land in natural condition is crucial. However, to improve a city’s development is on the contrary to the protection. In Taiwan, my country, there is more need for land to be developed for housing and industry.
First of all, Taiwan has small territory land with over 23,000,000 populations. In Taiwan, housing needs is always high especially for people living in the cities, such as Taipei and Taichung. Moreover, housing price is unaffordable for young people who work in the city. As the result, to exploit suburb areas and build bridges or roads for commuters become a solution. To take my cousins for an example, he couldn’t afford living in Taipei City, so he and his family bought an apartment at Linkou, where is a suburb area near Taipei. The traffic was planning to be very convenient for commuters. That is to say, more and more land being develop around the mega cities.
Secondly, Taiwan has to exploit land for commercial use. In regard of Taiwan’s international status, Taiwan is easy to be alienated by others countries. Therefore, improving our strength on economic is a way to let global see us. We build lots of factories in the west part of Taiwan, products including cloth, shoes and car tires. We exploit lands for agriculture in the south part of Taiwan. For example, we grows mangos in high quality and sells internationally.
Admittedly, it is dangerous to keep the development going on without restriction. A lot of habitats of endanger animals are being destroyed. It’s hard to see wild birds in Taipei City. However, Taiwan is trying her best to balance the development and nature. The government and non- governmental organizations puts in lots of efforts on protecting the natural land. We have strict law on land usage. People have to get permission to build in forrest. We set national parks to protect places from exploiting. As a citizen, I totally trust our government can provide a better place for people.
To sum up, my country is in a condition that more land need to be developed for housing and industry.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 426, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to live'.
Suggestion: to live
...sins for an example, he couldn’t afford living in Taipei City, so he and his family bo...
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Line 5, column 411, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'grow'
Suggestion: grow
...e south part of Taiwan. For example, we grows mangos in high quality and sells intern...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, such as, first of all, on the contrary, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1752.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8938547486 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81945295053 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558659217877 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 531.9 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 26.0550168936 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 67.3846153846 100.406767564 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7692307692 20.6045352989 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53846153846 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.462450386234 0.236089414692 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125319629358 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153110132391 0.0737576698707 208% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.340914259194 0.150856017488 226% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.178157622479 0.0645574589148 276% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 11.7677419355 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.49 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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