Official 28 - Integrated Writing Task
The passage mainly provides three reasons to support the truth of Robert Peary's claim that this famous explorer had reached North Pole within 37 days. However, the listening material cast doubt on the claims by pointing out the limitations of the three theories.
First and foremost, the passage believes that an investigation done by Notional Geographic Society proved that Peary did went to the North Pole. But the speaker says that the investigation was biased. Because the investigator is a close friend of Peary. He is also the one who raised the money for Peary's adventure, which makes it quite reasonable to question the reliability of the result of the investigation.
Secondly, the text suggests the speed is not an issue due to Tom Avery, another explorer has repeated Peary's trip within 37 days, thus Peary was telling the truth. In contrast, the listening points out Avery didn't carry the food all the way as Peary mentioned, instead, he has his food supply from an airplane. Also, in Avery's case, the weather condition was much better, which makes it easier to accomplish the trip.
Third, the author states that the photo, as Peary claimed, taken from the North Pole is a solid evidence. On the other hand, the lecturer argues that the shadows are the most important point to test the exact position of the photo. While on Peary's photo, the shadows were blur and fainted, which could not be a persuasive evidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 122, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'did' requires the base form of the verb: 'go', 'wend'
Suggestion: go; wend
...eographic Society proved that Peary did went to the North Pole. But the speaker says...
^^^^
Line 5, column 202, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...says that the investigation was biased. Because the investigator is a close friend of P...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 209, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ontrast, the listening points out Avery didnt carry the food all the way as Peary men...
^^^^^
Line 13, column 273, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'blurred'.
Suggestion: blurred
...While on Pearys photo, the shadows were blur and fainted, which could not be a persu...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, second, secondly, so, third, thus, while, in contrast, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 10.4613686534 96% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 5.04856512141 20% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 7.30242825607 41% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 12.0772626932 83% => OK
Pronoun: 12.0 22.412803532 54% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 30.3222958057 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 5.01324503311 160% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1200.0 1373.03311258 87% => OK
No of words: 243.0 270.72406181 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93827160494 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94822203886 4.04702891845 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4849493611 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 145.348785872 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.621399176955 0.540411800872 115% => OK
syllable_count: 360.0 419.366225166 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.23620309051 109% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.25165562914 240% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 2.5761589404 116% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 13.0662251656 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 21.2450331126 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5038143491 49.2860985944 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.0 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.25 21.698381199 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06452816374 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 4.19205298013 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 4.33554083885 161% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 4.45695364238 45% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.3589403974 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 53.8541721854 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.0289183223 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.2367328918 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.42419426049 107% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 63.6247240618 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.7273730684 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.498013245 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.2008830022 89% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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