People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
In current scenario where a world is place of competition and each and every one is part of a race where he/she wants to get ahead of others. Today at the birth of a child parents decide his/her future. Due to this race we have forgotten to establish relationship with other people, having nice talk with them and many more pleasures. Because of the hectic life people's behaviour has been changed a lot and this is mainly due to the force of outside environment of competition. However, there are some who have kept themselves away from the competition and their nature is what we dream off.
Today when a child is born his/her future is decided by their parents like he will be engineer or she will be a doctor and he/she do not get opportunity to do what they like and neglect those which they do not. This environment has made the children feel of an examination in every circumstance of life and they have forgot how to live a happy life. Their behaviour is largely determined by either the parents or the environment in which they are residing. They are not at all exposed to elated moments of life due to which their behavior is shaped according to this.
However, this is not true all the times. But looking deeper down the statement if we take example of the people who have received good education or have good understanding of good or bad do not get influenced by the forces of the outside world or other people. They just decide to live their life according to themselves and they do not let anybody else's ideas effect their living. They just try live a simpler and healthier life without affecting others and helping people out people in the world to make earth a better place.
So, I do assert up to some extent with the given statement but it would be an extreme to say that people's behaviour is largely determined by forces not of their own making. Although it is demonstrably correct, some have argues that people are largely affected by the others, believing that today's world is place of competition. However, this viewpoint on the present issue is negated by taking the examples of the people who are not affected by others like Abraham Lincoln, Steve Jobs who continued their work with passion led to a jocund life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: EACH_AND_EVERY[1]
Message: Consider using 'each one'.
Suggestion: each one
...ere a world is place of competition and each and every one is part of a race where he/she wants to...
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Line 3, column 131, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...neer or she will be a doctor and he/she do not get opportunity to do what they lik...
^^
Line 3, column 318, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'forgotten'.
Suggestion: forgotten
...very circumstance of life and they have forgot how to live a happy life. Their behavio...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.218823529412 0.240241500013 91% => OK
Verbs: 0.202352941176 0.157235817809 129% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0682352941176 0.0880659088768 77% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0517647058824 0.0497285424764 104% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0635294117647 0.0444667217837 143% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.105882352941 0.12292977631 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0658823529412 0.0406280797675 162% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.47902125012 2.79330140395 89% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0352941176471 0.030933414821 114% => OK
Particles: 0.00470588235294 0.0016655270985 283% => OK
Determiners: 0.103529411765 0.0997080785238 104% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00705882352941 0.0249443105267 28% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.0305882352941 0.0148568991511 206% => Maybe 'Which' is overused. If other WH_determiners like 'Who, What, Whom, Whose...' are used too in sentences, then there are no issues.
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2243.0 2732.02544248 82% => OK
No of words: 401.0 452.878318584 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.59351620948 6.0361032391 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.58838876751 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.299251870324 0.366273622748 82% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.214463840399 0.280924506359 76% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.122194513716 0.200843997647 61% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0872817955112 0.132149295362 66% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47902125012 2.79330140395 89% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 219.290929204 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486284289277 0.48968727796 99% => OK
Word variations: 52.7730947734 55.4138127331 95% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6194690265 78% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0625 23.380412469 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.8092188398 59.4972553346 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.1875 141.124799967 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0625 23.380412469 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.3125 0.674092028746 46% => More Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.94800884956 81% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 46.5088840399 51.4728631049 90% => OK
Elegance: 1.22962962963 1.64882698954 75% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.314584934345 0.391690518653 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.114668641203 0.123202303941 93% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0744794678685 0.077325440228 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.523157396452 0.547984918172 95% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.123867158322 0.149214159877 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125232774467 0.161403998019 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0731705593851 0.0892212321368 82% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.386401948256 0.385218514788 100% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0228837629903 0.0692045440612 33% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223490787221 0.275328986314 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0765957149159 0.0653680567796 117% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.30420353982 57% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88274336283 82% => OK
Positive topic words: 5.0 7.22455752212 69% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 3.66592920354 27% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.70907079646 74% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 13.5995575221 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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