Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Today,many advertisements are addressed to young children.For example, advertisements related to soap,shampoo or other things of children.Many of these advertisements have not appropriate content for children.These type of content can harm the children's mentality and behavior.
Studies show that we tend to change our behavior or thinking regarding the conditions around us.Television plays an important role in today's life.A normal family tends to spend their time on television about 2 hours each day.So the children are exposed to the various advertisements on the daily basis.So some harmful advertisements can change the behavior of children badly.For example, it was shown in the television advertising of that a small child can jump on the roof after eating the biscuit.Children don't have their own decision-making ability.Hence,they absorb all the information around them and try to emulate that.We can see these type of imitations while spending time with small children e.g. sometimes a child tries to open the fridge or starts a television.So,parents should limit the television channels or try to divert the child while imitating some bad behaviors.But it is not the total solution.Parents can't stop the natural development process of a child totally means they can't control all the behaviors of the child.
On the other side, few harmless advertisements can also make bad changes in the behavior the young child.For example,a advertise shows a child drinking milk with protein powder from the kitchen.Now, when the young child tries to imitate this behavior, he is not totally aware of which powder should be taken from the kitchen.So it is possible he mistakenly takes something harmful.Now,the question is how to stop these harmful conditions.But,I think we rather should take steps to reduce these circumstances.
So,in my opinion, television advertising regulation board(censor board) should take reduce/stop these harmful pictures from advertising.In addition to these steps,parents should take care of behaviors of the child.It is required that they keep an eye on the child all the time and reduce the exposure of bad advertisement on the child.
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['also', 'but', 'e.g.', 'hence', 'if', 'regarding', 'so', 'while', 'for example', 'i think', 'in addition', 'in my opinion']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.277008310249 0.229887763892 120% => OK
Verbs: 0.171745152355 0.158761421928 108% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0886426592798 0.0866891130778 102% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0277008310249 0.046263068375 60% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0443213296399 0.0685040099705 65% => OK
Prepositions: 0.102493074792 0.118717715034 86% => OK
Participles: 0.0304709141274 0.0351676179071 87% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.47146361933 2.67179642975 130% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0332409972299 0.0309702414327 107% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.130193905817 0.0887237588012 147% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0277008310249 0.0209618222197 132% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00831024930748 0.0139019557991 60% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2179.0 2387.08602151 91% => OK
No of words: 332.0 408.028673835 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.56325301205 5.86048508987 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48200974243 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.376506024096 0.338922669872 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.295180722892 0.251872472559 117% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.237951807229 0.174417080927 136% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.171686746988 0.112833075102 152% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.47146361933 2.67179642975 130% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557228915663 0.524397521467 106% => OK
Word variations: 60.4840407455 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 20.6684587814 24% => More sentences wanted.
Sentence length: 66.4 20.5533526081 323% => Sentence lengths are too long.
Sentence length SD: 157.880461109 48.84282405 323% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 435.8 120.699889404 361% => Less chars per sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 66.4 20.5533526081 323% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.4 0.644075263715 373% => Less Discourse Markers wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 40.0 5.54480286738 721% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 95.9180722892 45.7405998639 210% => OK
Elegance: 1.68181818182 1.45489161554 116% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146512315724 0.300154397459 49% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.339976883273 0.103427244359 329% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0351732032684 0.0752933317313 47% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.927767464463 0.497263757937 187% => Sentence paragraph similarity is high.
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.100784755731 0.151897553556 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103968527361 0.114077575197 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0175922794986 0.0781384742642 23% => The sentences are too close to each other.
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.408955373886 0.336927656856 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0777046403573 0.067059652881 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.111163281512 0.210909579961 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0151454751125 0.0618886996521 24% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 11.8870967742 8% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.86379928315 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.91756272401 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 1.0 8.42114695341 12% => More positive topic words wanted.
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 2.75985663082 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 5.0 13.6433691756 37% => More topic words wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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