The surest indicator of a great nation is represented not by the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists, but by the general welfare of its people.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
To ensure the general welfare of the people in a nation, the nation has to not only have the ability but also have a good system to make it happen. Different people may have different indicators of a great nation in mind; however, they may find their believed indicators do not contradict with “the general welfare of the people.” I therefore agree with the claim.
The general welfare of people including all aspects, such as human rights, cultural needs and economic success. In order to enhance the general welfare, a nation has to be strong enough overall. It has to have a robust economy to provide the financial foundation for its people to succeed. It is necessary to have prosperous cultural resources so that the cultural needs could be satisfied. It is also indispensable for the nation to have a good political and social system to assure the well-being or its people. Since the general welfare encompass virtually all aspects, though some people may have some peculiar indicators of a great nation in mind, these particular ones are constituent parts of the general welfare of its people, which therefore is the surest indicator.
The united states is a great nation. It has the largest economy in the world and spends about 37 percent of its GDP on the welfare system. Its technological and scientific achievements are also leading. In addition, government funding has bolstered the cultural life of its people, such as arts and historical events. Moreover, the United states has an effective political system to guard the human rights of its people including freedom, beliefs, and the like. All aforementioned elements work together to fortify the general welfare of its people. In other words, one can see how strong a nation is in all aspects by looking at the general welfare of its people, which is hence a reliable indicator of a great nation.
Some people may argue that China is a great nation though it only spends approximately twelve percent of its GDP on welfare, has the tightest restraints regarding using the internet, and has put people’s health and environment at a great risk because of the pollution. They have convincing reasons. According to U.S.News, China is the third most powerful country in the world. China has the world second-largest economy, right after in the United States. Besides, based on the data from the Journalist’s Resource, China has taken a major role in world science and technology. Based on these factors, China is believed to be a great nation. As we can see, people may see a nation great because it is powerful and strong. However, with general welfare to be the indicator, a nation is not only strong and powerful but also has a good system to ensure it. So, whoever believes that China is a great nation, he will likely believe the United States is one as well. “The general welfare” is hence the surest indicator.
In conclusion, due to the particular achievements of its rulers, artists or scientist, a nation may be peculiarly strong in one or some aspects, which could be the reasons for some people to say it is a great nation. However, with the general welfare of its people, a nation has to be strong in all aspects. It is therefore the surest indicator.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: To ensure the general welfare of the people in a nation, the nation has to not only have the ability but also have a good system to make it happen.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a negator
Suggestion: Refer to to and not
flaws:
In the second paragraph, why 'the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists' is not the surest indicator?
The third paragraph should be an argument. It is not good to put a full paragraph as an example.
In the fourth paragraph, why “The general welfare” is hence the surest indicator after you compare two countries. maybe there are other indicators too, like: crime rate, gun abuse...
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Why we asked above questions? because actually it is easier to write the essay argue against the statement, instead of support.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 29 15
No. of Words: 554 350
No. of Characters: 2600 1500
No. of Different Words: 210 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.852 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.693 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.59 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 208 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 135 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.103 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.483 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.724 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.345 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.479 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Hi, I have read a couple of
Hi, I have read a couple of high mark essays on this topic. I have a question regarding this one:
http://www.testbig.com/gmatgre-essays/surest-indicator-great-nation-rep…
This author agreed with the author as well. I noticed, in my opinion, he did not really give reasons why "the general welfare of people " should be the indicator. Rather, his essay treated it as the premise and used it to explain why he thinks India is not a great nation (because of weak welfare of its people) and why Israel is a great nation ( because of it treats its people well). I am confused. Could you please help out here?
Yes, you are right. It has
Yes, you are right. It has some arguments in the introduction and some inside the essay body, but overall this essay treated it as the premise. Other than that, the essay is still a good essay with well polished languages. Thank you to remind us.
You are welcome. I was afraid
You are welcome. I was afraid my logic was wrong.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 392, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the cultural needs could be satisfied. It is also indispensable for the nation to...
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Line 3, column 777, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hich therefore is the surest indicator. The united states is a great nation. It ...
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Line 7, column 322, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: News
...ve convincing reasons. According to U.S.News, China is the third most powerful count...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'may', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'third', 'well', 'as to', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.228706624606 0.240241500013 95% => OK
Verbs: 0.135646687697 0.157235817809 86% => OK
Adjectives: 0.119873817035 0.0880659088768 136% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0488958990536 0.0497285424764 98% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0441640378549 0.0444667217837 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0914826498423 0.12292977631 74% => OK
Participles: 0.0252365930599 0.0406280797675 62% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.78851781898 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0315457413249 0.030933414821 102% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.123028391167 0.0997080785238 123% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0173501577287 0.0249443105267 70% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00788643533123 0.0148568991511 53% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3274.0 2732.02544248 120% => OK
No of words: 552.0 452.878318584 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93115942029 6.0361032391 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84713113593 4.58838876751 106% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.38768115942 0.366273622748 106% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.286231884058 0.280924506359 102% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.177536231884 0.200843997647 88% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.114130434783 0.132149295362 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78851781898 2.79330140395 100% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 219.290929204 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.391304347826 0.48968727796 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 45.5673047461 55.4138127331 82% => OK
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6194690265 136% => OK
Sentence length: 19.7142857143 23.380412469 84% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.2438833976 59.4972553346 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.928571429 141.124799967 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.7142857143 23.380412469 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.714285714286 0.674092028746 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.21349557522 58% => OK
Readability: 48.3374741201 51.4728631049 94% => OK
Elegance: 1.51034482759 1.64882698954 92% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.579561789335 0.391690518653 148% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.126954287522 0.123202303941 103% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0779091502888 0.077325440228 101% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.517674620258 0.547984918172 94% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.169685957802 0.149214159877 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.235774492478 0.161403998019 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110350144006 0.0892212321368 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.56981627114 0.385218514788 148% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0490926627412 0.0692045440612 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.453089796524 0.275328986314 165% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462227189369 0.0653680567796 71% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 10.4325221239 220% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 5.30420353982 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88274336283 102% => OK
Positive topic words: 19.0 7.22455752212 263% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 3.66592920354 0% => More negative topic words wanted.
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.70907079646 111% => OK
Total topic words: 22.0 13.5995575221 162% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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