The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040. A period of 100 years.proportion of aged people increased in three different countries.
In 1940, USA in aged 65 and over population was 8%,Sweden in 7%, and japan in 5%. Japan in aged 65 and over population decreased biggest between 1940 to 1980. Due to absence of medical treatment or other reason. After, 2000 in that population dramatically increased and reached at 27% in 2040. There are high compared to USA and Sweden.
USA in 1980 population were reduce at 15% therefore, fall slightly between 1990 to 2020 after that continuous increased. In 2040 it was 23%. In Sweden population 65 aged and above continuously increased.there people are aware of their health.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'graphs'.
Suggestion: graphs
The line graph below shows the proportion of the popul...
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Line 3, column 24, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
...USA and Sweden. USA in 1980 population were reduce at 15% therefore, fall slightly ...
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reduced'.
Suggestion: reduced
...nd Sweden. USA in 1980 population were reduce at 15% therefore, fall slightly between...
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Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...there people are aware of their health.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 642.0 965.302439024 67% => OK
No of words: 130.0 196.424390244 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93846153846 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.37664837539 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95984966834 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 77.0 106.607317073 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.592307692308 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 186.3 283.868780488 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => Sentence length is too short
Sentence length SD: 28.7081869856 43.030603864 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.2 112.824112599 57% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 13.0 22.9334400587 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.7 5.23603664747 32% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.352018906736 0.215688989381 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.145975748892 0.103423049105 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145312654955 0.0843802449381 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273029027328 0.15604864568 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.157738174316 0.0819641961636 192% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.3 13.2329268293 63% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 75.2 61.2550243902 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.48 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => The average readability is low. Need to improve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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