People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Unlike the opinion accepted by some, people's behavior is mostly shaped by their immediate surrounding and is not the result of their own making.
A behavior is challenged and stimulated by the environment one is exposed to. Certainly, any student has been under stressful testing conditions during an educational training. Though every individual manage emotions in an idiosyncratic way, stress and exhaustion can push a student to cheat, plagiarize or become either significantly productive, or in the worse case scenario, counterproductive- turning a blank exam back to the examiner. It is the situation per se that generate an impulse and a responsive attitude considered usually typical. Very rarely would one see a stressed student under a standardized test shouting and dancing. He may be biting his nails, shaking his legs and managing his behavior as other student would under similar circumstances.
Furthermore, a behavior is adaptive to a situation. As a matter of fact, it is what life requires and taught humanity. As history has proven through Darwin’s theory of evolution, humans evolved physically through time and circumstances. The environment requiring certain skills for survival are then selected and preserved in our genetic code and passed down from one generation to the next. It is “the survival of the fittest.” The consummate hunter who developed a strong musculature, impressive dexterity and sharp sight will be capable of getting a raft of animals to feed from. It is this adaptive capability that is acquired, and not his innate nature, which depict the painting of evolution and this is the belief dominating the scientific world.
Though behavior is generated in response to outside forces, it is ultimately the choice of the individual to start in a particular path. Indeed, every individual has what is so often referred to as “the free will.” A teenager can choose to drink alcohol and drive or to abstain, even though he or she may be under a social group influence. One can decide to refuse to use drug, even if it has been offered at no charge, not only for the reason being that it is illegal, but because it can be detrimental to one’s health and one’s peer surrounding him or her under influence of the drug. “Free will” has even been mentioned in the bible and is an accepted belief that dominate many religion. In Judaism, Pharaoh may have had his heart hardened by God not to let the Jewish nation leave Egypt, but ultimately it was up to him to decide to enslave them in the first place or to free them from slavery before any of the plagues stroked upon his nation.
Similarly to many beings on earth, humans are given the ability to respond to their surrounding and adapt as indicated. However, it is one’s own decision to choose which route to take at a fork after being directed to an intersection.
- Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve. 83
- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 16
- The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company."According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any 66
- People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. 66
- Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study in which jobs are plentiful. 58
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 218, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an idiosyncratic way" with adverb for "idiosyncratic"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...Though every individual manage emotions in an idiosyncratic way, stress and exhaustion can push a stude...
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Line 3, column 519, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[9]
Message: The adverb 'usually' is usually put before the verb 'considered'.
Suggestion: usually considered
...te an impulse and a responsive attitude considered usually typical. Very rarely would one see a st...
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Line 4, column 444, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...apos;the survival of the fittest.' The consummate hunter who developed a strong musculatu...
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Line 4, column 526, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ng musculature, impressive dexterity and sharp sight will be capable of getting a...
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Line 5, column 491, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...on being that it is illegal, but because it can be detrimental to one's heal...
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Line 5, column 707, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun religion seems to be countable; consider using: 'many religions'.
Suggestion: many religions
...and is an accepted belief that dominate many religion. In Judaism, Pharaoh may have had his h...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...f the plagues stroked upon his nation. Similarly to many beings on earth, humans are giv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, similarly, so, then, as a matter of fact, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2428.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.04781704782 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9811715458 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 215.323595506 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.559251559252 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 790.2 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.740449438202 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.014736152 60.3974514979 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.4 118.986275619 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.05 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.21951772744 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.172197995745 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523504804923 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0722612397872 0.0758088955206 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125557850696 0.150359130593 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.104746895639 0.0667264976115 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.1639044944 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.