describe any festival
Every festive occasion brings joy and wealth for human beings. I am festival aholic person so, i adore festival. Indian people celebrate several festival such as holi,lohari,diwali and so on. Here i would like to establish my views about diwali.
It falls around october or november. Diwali is celebrated in the memory of lord rama. On that day, lord rama returned to ayodha after the exile of fourteen years and ayodha citizen gave warm welcome to lord rama with pump and shown and illuminated the earthen lumps of clarified butter.
I also celebrate diwali many time. generally, i celebrate diwali with my family but when i go out of town, i celebrate diwali with kith and kins,near and dears as well as peer group with simplicity. On the day of celebration, as usually i go to sikh temple with family and listen hymns to feel peace of mind and distribute required things to desitude people. moreover, i go to market with peer group for buying same things such as gifts, dessert, outfits,footwears,crackers and many more for small kids of my family.gone are the days,when people beauity their dwelling by earthen lump but at presant,people beauity their dwelling by electronic bulb,candles and by same othet artificial things. Later on we watch a bomb blasting block buster with friends. People show our pleasure by buying several things and beauity their dwelling and keep them spik and span
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In evening, i tastefully decorate my dwelling with esrthen lump of clarified butter, candle, electrinic bulb and by same artificial things. Moreover,people worship to god joy and wealth of their family. In addition, we get together and my family conduct a small party ,we celebrate it with simplicity. It is unexpected as well as worth- remembring party for me so, i really relish that party. Furthermore, we taste multicuisines dish,snacks as well as beverage. Later on, we burn crackers and distribute dessert to all. In addition, we all dance on D.J. floor,i also share my foot step with them.
Eventually,i hug with all and say bye-bye to my peer group. In this way,i celebrate diwali by pump and shown.
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Sentence: I am festival aholic person so, i adore festival.
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Sentence: In addition, we get together and my family conduct a small party ,we celebrate it with simplicity.
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Sentence: On the day of celebration, as usually i go to sikh temple with family and listen hymns to feel peace of mind and distribute required things to desitude people. moreover, i go to market with peer group for buying same things such as gifts, dessert, outfits,footwears,crackers and many more for small kids of my family.gone are the days,when people beauity their dwelling by earthen lump but at presant,people beauity their dwelling by electronic bulb,candles and by same othet artificial things.
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Sentence: People show our pleasure by buying several things and beauity their dwelling and keep them spik and span .
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Sentence: In evening, i tastefully decorate my dwelling with esrthen lump of clarified butter, candle, electrinic bulb and by same artificial things.
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Error: esrthen Suggestion: earthen
Sentence: It is unexpected as well as worth- remembring party for me so, i really relish that party.
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