The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph illustrates how many Australian male and female of various ages did regular physical activity in terms of percentage in 2010. According to the graph, the proportion of both male and female of each group changed considerably. The highest figure of male who did regular physical exercise belongs to the 15 to 24 age group, while women at the age from 45 to 54 did regular physical exercise the most.

As we can see from the graph, men in 15 to 24 age group witnessed the highest number of people exercising regularly, with 52,8%, compared to the lowest number of people from 35 to 44 years old, with only 39,5%. The number in 25 to 34 age group seemed similar to that in the group of men from 45 to 54 years old. Furthermore, men at the age from 45 to 64 have them almost same proportion, roughly 45%.

The number of women who exercised regularly was considerably different from that of men. With more than 53%, women from 45 to 54 exercised the most amongst all age groups, while female in the 35 to 44 and 56 to 64 age group are equally energetic, with 52,5% and 53% respectively. In addition, women who are older than 60 exercised the less and are quite similar to women in the 15 to 24 and 25 to 34.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 131, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...physical activity in terms of percentage in 2010. According to the graph, the pro...
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Line 5, column 130, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'exercised' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'exercises'.
Suggestion: exercises
...With more than 53%, women from 45 to 54 exercised the most amongst all age groups, while ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, if, while, in addition

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 33.7804878049 142% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 996.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 228.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.36842105263 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49031673472 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469298245614 0.547539520022 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 299.7 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8076604159 43.030603864 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 112.824112599 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 22.9334400587 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.88888888889 5.23603664747 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236850357733 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119740714068 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0816972392653 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175528007772 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0798165114267 0.0819641961636 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.48 61.2550243902 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.36 11.4140731707 73% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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