Some people think women should be allowed to join the army, the navy and the air force just like men. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is sometimes argued that women should be made to join the military. While i disagree with the idea of letting women attend the armed forces. I do believe that women will be a boon to the force.
On the one hand, I believe that women should not join the army as their primary function is to prepare food and look after their work and be well done without caring the work at home. For example, women have to give birth to the child and nurture them, it would be impossible for them to get leave at the time of war if they are in the force.
On the other hand, it is also argued that women can play a vital role in the armed force. In the present times, women taking on and performing outstandingly well on almost all the jobs that were once traditionally dominated by the men. As a result they will be considered the solid companions with the men.
In conclusion, it could be true that women should not attend in the military but i stongly suggest that women should be permitted to carry their army mission out that could be a good way to protect the country as well as respect women right.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...en should be made to join the military. While i disagree with the idea of letting wom...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
Suggestion: I
...uld be made to join the military. While i disagree with the idea of letting women...
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Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nce traditionally dominated by the men. As a result they will be considered the so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 1615.20841683 55% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 208.0 315.596192385 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.29326923077 5.12529762239 84% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 4.20363070211 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.21604369703 2.80592935109 79% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 176.041082164 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.528846153846 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 280.8 506.74238477 55% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 61.0719066165 49.4020404114 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.2222222222 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1111111111 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.0 7.06120827912 170% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215250890088 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0982690498182 0.084324248473 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504835826593 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14246774556 0.151304729494 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0516004282763 0.056905535591 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 50.2224549098 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.9 12.4159519038 64% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.98 8.58950901804 81% => OK
difficult_words: 29.0 78.4519038076 37% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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