people who have various knowledge are more successful in their lives
The answer to this question can be varied from person to person. In my opinion, people learning various skill are more likely to become prosperous in their lives. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, the more people have various knowledge and experience, the more they are able to succeed in their lives. As a matter of fact, due to the competetive sitauion of market, people can loose their job easily, and under this circumstances, they can find a decent job by other ability. Moreover, having various skills enable individuals to promote their lives better because they are skilfull enough in a wide variety of fields. An example will illustrate this viewpoint much better. My brother was a mechanical engineer, due to a lot of sanctions of our country, they had plenty of problems in importing their primary materials. Eventually, he missed his job easily. Since my brother an accomplished painter, he had started painting, and also he held his first exhibition last month. It was very interesting and also he earned a hoard of money. Until this incident occurred did I realize the importance of having various skill in people's life. As a result, I do believe that if anyone has various information and skills, he/she does not have serious problems to find a decent job.
Secondly, people who have different knowledge are able to interact with others easily. In fact, they could become familiar with various people with different attitude and knowledge in order to gain knowledge. For example, when I was a bachelor student, I had a part-time job in university campus magazine as a reporter. As I remember, on time, I had an interview with professor Nejati who is a well-known psychologist in my country. He said that experiences have shown us that people have various knowledge are a sociable person and they are able to release their stresses and tensions by spending their time with a lot of person and recover themselves readily. On the other hand, people who are professional in one skill, are the ones who have one dimension mind and just think about their duties. In addition, there is a famous proverb in Persian the equivalent of which in English may sound like this "the more people interact with others due to being multi-function person, the more they will be successful in their lives".
In conclusion, no one can deny the enormous positive effects of being skillful in a wide variety of fields. Not only are they able to find a decent job easily, But also they they can make friedn with others and have fun.
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- To improve the quality of education, universities should spend money on salaries university professors. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely tosucceed than students who do not. 60
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement The most important ways to improve the people s health is to clean the environment 63
- do you agree or disagree it is better to use your own knowledge and experience to solve problems than to ask other people for advice 75
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 196, Rule ID: LOOSE_LOSE[2]
Message: Did you mean 'lose' (= miss, waste, suffer the loss etc.)?
Suggestion: lose
...petetive sitauion of market, people can loose their job easily, and under this circum...
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Line 3, column 230, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...e can loose their job easily, and under this circumstances, they can find a decent j...
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Line 3, column 855, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Until” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ng and also he earned a hoard of money. Until this incident occurred did I realize th...
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Line 5, column 615, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of people', 'a lot of persons'.
Suggestion: a lot of people; a lot of persons
...nd tensions by spending their time with a lot of person and recover themselves readily. On the ...
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Line 7, column 170, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: they
...e to find a decent job easily, But also they they can make friedn with others and have fu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, as a matter of fact, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2177.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88116591928 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69592239256 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504484304933 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 688.5 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.123313537 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9545454545 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2727272727 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.90909090909 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389019757153 0.236089414692 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108611573098 0.076458572812 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11736131733 0.0737576698707 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210433786118 0.150856017488 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144516951684 0.0645574589148 224% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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