The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land in sea. What are the reasons and solutions?

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The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land in sea. What are the reasons and solutions?

The animal species both in wildlife and undersea are undergoing a noticeable extinction in recent years. The main reason behind this is the significant increase in the amount of the forest removed, which diminish the living space of other animals. Moreover, the ocean species are also threatened with extinction caused by pollution from factories. In my opinion, these problems can be mitigated by the help of the government.

To begin with, due to the overgrowing population in the whole world, human needs more space to live. To fulfil the demands, there are a considerably increased in the amount of deforestation. Subsequently, the habitat of animals is slowly disappearing and thus the extinction of some wildlife species is inevitable. In addition, because of the expensive in the construction of wasted processing, some factories exerted their wasted product outside nature. That is, in the ocean environment, the species can not live in contaminate water and thus become an endangered species.

The government should take an action in order to preserve the environment. First, for the deforestation problems, the government should restrict the forest area to prevent the intruder. If any individual involved in the removal of trees, then they must be punished severely. To mitigate pollution, the government needs to introduce a more stringent policy for industrial activities. For example, the company that exerted wasted product directly to nature should be banned permanently.

In conclusion, I personally believe that people are taking more seriously in the extinction of wildlife and ocean species. The authority plays an important role in mitigating these issue by introducing stricter laws against deforestation and environmental contamination.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, then, thus, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 24.0651302605 42% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58364312268 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14044334985 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587360594796 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 479.7 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 10.0 2.52805611222 396% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 21.304984012 49.4020404114 43% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.875 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8125 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.1423242068 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421148937784 0.084324248473 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556517316085 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810794485518 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0671526145177 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 50.2224549098 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.3 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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