Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to our news programs and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should expand our coverage of weather and local news on all our news programs
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The writer concludes that to instead of loosing further advertising revenue they should have more coverage of the weather and the local news program. However, the conclusion relies on assumptions for which there is no clear evidence.
Firstly, the writer assumes that they have started loosing the contract with the local buisness which were advertising in there channel has no clear affirmation. It may be possible that the local businesses are loosing contracy because it may have ended up there own advertising period in which they wish to advertise as per the company norms and regulation or they may have the gathered information that there company revenue is not as boosted as expected with the advertisment as they have projected or they may be finding it the rates of the advertisment is been high as compared to the other channel all these can be concluded when the author provide more statistical data.
In addition, the writer assumes that the user complaints for the more for the weather and the local news instead of the national news can not be concluded because writer didn’t provided enough data for it because people interest of news also depends upon the season for example if it’s monsoon people tends to look more for the weather because they may be already prepared if it’s going to rain heavily they may prefer goverment transport instead of the private vehicles because of lot of traffic issues. Similarly they are interested in the local news may be due to the election in the near by area or for the value of the market currently going on
Finally, the writer assumes that local advertisment are cancelling the contracts because the the advertisment done depends upon the age group itself for example the advertisment done for any dance classes or any sports classes may not be interested for working man to watch it because it has no root relation with it which makes viewer not satisfactory with the advertismnet and adverised company does not get enough revenue from it
In conclusion, this argument depends on certain simplified assumptions about whether or not they should forecast the local news and weather instead of the national news. The author could strengthen the argument by discussing other factors beyond the compalin and the advertismnet company before concluding that it may depend on multiple scenario to conclued writer dhould have provide enough data to draw on to an final point.
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Firstly, the writer assumes that they have started loosing the contract with the local buisness which were advertising in there channel has no clear affirmation.
Error: buisness Suggestion: business
Sentence: It may be possible that the local businesses are loosing contracy because it may have ended up there own advertising period in which they wish to advertise as per the company norms and regulation or they may have the gathered information that there company revenue is not as boosted as expected with the advertisment as they have projected or they may be finding it the rates of the advertisment is been high as compared to the other channel all these can be concluded when the author provide more
Error: contracy Suggestion: contract
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Sentence: In addition, the writer assumes that the user complaints for the more for the weather and the local news instead of the national news can not be concluded because writer didn't provided enough data for it because people interest of news also depends upon the season for example if it's monsoon people tends to look more for the weather because they may be already prepared if it's going to rain heavily they may prefer goverment transport instead of the private vehicles because of lot of traffic
Error: goverment Suggestion: government
Sentence: Finally, the writer assumes that local advertisment are cancelling the contracts because the the advertisment done depends upon the age group itself for example the advertisment done for any dance classes or any sports classes may not be interested for working man to watch it because it has no root relation with it which makes viewer not satisfactory with the advertismnet and adverised company does not get enough revenue from it
Error: advertismnet Suggestion: advertisement
Error: advertisment Suggestion: advertisement
Error: adverised Suggestion: advertised
Sentence: The author could strengthen the argument by discussing other factors beyond the compalin and the advertismnet company before concluding that it may depend on multiple scenario to conclued writer dhould have provide enough data to draw on to an final point.
Error: advertismnet Suggestion: advertisement
Error: dhould Suggestion: should
Error: compalin Suggestion: complain
Error: conclued Suggestion: conclude
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly correct
argument 3 -- duplicated to argument 1
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 11 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 407 350
No. of Characters: 2003 1500
No. of Different Words: 180 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.492 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.921 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.572 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 120 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 64 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33.917 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 30.445 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.422 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.659 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
. The writer concludes that to ins...
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Line 7, column 52, Rule ID: LOOSING_EFFORTRECORDSEASON[1]
Message: Did you mean 'losing the'?
Suggestion: losing the
...e writer assumes that they have started loosing the contract with the local buisness which ...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 258, Rule ID: THERE_OWN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'their own'?
Suggestion: their own
...g contracy because it may have ended up there own advertising period in which they wish t...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 521, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Similarly,
...icles because of lot of traffic issues. Similarly they are interested in the local news m...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 603, Rule ID: NEAR_BY[1]
Message: Did you mean 'nearby'?
Suggestion: nearby
... news may be due to the election in the near by area or for the value of the market cur...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 90, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...nt are cancelling the contracts because the the advertisment done depends upon the age ...
^^^^^^^
Line 11, column 90, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...nt are cancelling the contracts because the the advertisment done depends upon the age ...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 78, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
...on certain simplified assumptions about whether or not they should forecast the local news and...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 378, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'provided'.
Suggestion: provided
...scenario to conclued writer dhould have provide enough data to draw on to an final poin...
^^^^^^^
Line 13, column 412, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... have provide enough data to draw on to an final point.
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, look, may, similarly, so, then, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2056.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 406.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06403940887 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6317742294 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.443349753695 0.468620217663 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 639.9 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 58.0 22.8473053892 254% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 231.274110712 57.8364921388 400% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 293.714285714 119.503703932 246% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 58.0 23.324526521 249% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 16.4285714286 5.70786347227 288% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150572633673 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793984799124 0.0743258471296 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0718650855535 0.0701772020484 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100438680183 0.128457276422 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0488201535933 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.4 14.3799401198 218% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 12.61 48.3550499002 26% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.9 12.197005988 212% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.96 12.5979740519 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.32208582834 119% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 25.2 11.1389221557 226% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 11.9071856287 218% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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