The citizens of Forsythe have adopted more healthful lifestyles. Their responses to a recent survey show that in their eating habits they conform more closely to government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. Furthermore, there has been a fourfold increase in sales of food products containing kiran, a substance that a scientific study has shown reduces cholesterol. This trend is also evident in reduced sales of sulia, a food that few of the most healthy citizens regularly eat.
Writer concludes that the citizen of the forsythe have adopted healthfull lifestyle. However the conclusion relies on assumption for which we do not have any clear evidences.
Firstly author states that according to the recent survey the citizen of the forsythe have addopted more healthy ifestyle because of having more government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago. The recommendation provided by the nutrion of the government may be suited to the recommendation provided by other people ten years ago to the people who are been surveyed because every individual have different metabolism activity as a result it doesn’t suited every person to whom it has been recommended otherly the author should have provided about the person detail about whom they have been surved because if student have been surveyd they can adopt to any eating habit fastly as compared to the olderly people.
Secondly author states that increasing in the food product such as kiran whoes scientific studies states that it reduces the cholestrol in an human body but the author didn’t provided any root affirmation to support this idea because the increasing the sale of the substances may be because of the taste of kiran. It may also be possible that person buying substances kiran wouldn’t have recommended nutrion from the government
moreover author states that the reduces sales of sulia the food that few of the most healthy citizen used to regullarly eat may be because of the other reason because as they are old people they might been bored of eating the sulia and tried eatin the new food there may also be reason such as thinking of the old person that they won’t be living more life if they eat healthy food they may live 2 to 3 months more whear as if they eat different food they won’t have a regreation movement in there life of not having other food except the sulia
in conclsion, there is no clear affirmation provided by the author except the sales of sulia and kiran as well of the nutrion recommendation provided by the government body instead if the author provides more evidendces such as season in which it is surved or people who are been surved and number of people who have been surved then we could have the been reached on to some conclusion
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Writer concludes that the citizen of the forsythe have adopted healthfull lifestyle.
Error: healthfull Suggestion: healthful
Error: forsythe Suggestion: forsake
Sentence: Firstly author states that according to the recent survey the citizen of the forsythe have addopted more healthy ifestyle because of having more government nutritional recommendations than they did ten years ago.
Error: ifestyle Suggestion: lifestyle
Error: forsythe Suggestion: forsake
Error: addopted Suggestion: adopted
Sentence: The recommendation provided by the nutrion of the government may be suited to the recommendation provided by other people ten years ago to the people who are been surveyed because every individual have different metabolism activity as a result it doesn't suited every person to whom it has been recommended otherly the author should have provided about the person detail about whom they have been surved because if student have been surveyd they can adopt to any eating habit fastly as compared to
Error: nutrion Suggestion: nation
Error: surved Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: otherly Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: surveyd Suggestion: survey
Error: fastly Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: the olderly people.
Error: olderly Suggestion: orderly
Sentence: Secondly author states that increasing in the food product such as kiran whoes scientific studies states that it reduces the cholestrol in an human body but the author didn't provided any root affirmation to support this idea because the increasing the sale of the substances may be because of the taste of kiran.
Error: whoes Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: cholestrol Suggestion: control
Sentence: It may also be possible that person buying substances kiran wouldn't have recommended nutrion from the government
Error: nutrion Suggestion: nation
Sentence: moreover author states that the reduces sales of sulia the food that few of the most healthy citizen used to regullarly eat may be because of the other reason because as they are old people they might been bored of eating the sulia and tried eatin the new food there may also be reason such as thinking of the old person that they won't be living more life if they eat healthy food they may live 2 to 3 months more whear as if they eat different food they won't have a regreation movement in there
Error: whear Suggestion: wheat
Error: eatin Suggestion: eating
Error: regreation Suggestion: recreation
Error: regullarly Suggestion: regularly
Sentence: in conclsion, there is no clear affirmation provided by the author except the sales of sulia and kiran as well of the nutrion recommendation provided by the government body instead if the author provides more evidendces such as season in which it is surved or people who are been surved and number of people who have been surved then we could have the been reached on to some conclusion
Error: nutrion Suggestion: nation
Error: surved Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: evidendces Suggestion: evidences
Error: conclsion Suggestion: conclusion
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flaws:
Need to put punctuation marks. It is hard to read.
No. of Spelling Errors: 25 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 25 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1872 1500
No. of Different Words: 164 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.751 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.529 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 133 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 54 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 35 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 39.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 32.589 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.407 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.691 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.142 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 86, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ythe have adopted healthfull lifestyle. However the conclusion relies on assumption for...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: ADOPT_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'adapt to'?
Suggestion: adapt to
...e if student have been surveyd they can adopt to any eating habit fastly as compared to ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 140, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...tates that it reduces the cholestrol in an human body but the author didn't p...
^^
Line 6, column 438, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... recommended nutrion from the government moreover author states that the reduces ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: moreover,
...ended nutrion from the government moreover author states that the reduces sales of...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 202, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have been' or 'be'?
Suggestion: have been; be
...cause as they are old people they might been bored of eating the sulia and tried eat...
^^^^
Line 9, column 207, Rule ID: BORED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
... as they are old people they might been bored of eating the sulia and tried eatin the ne...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, well, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1922.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 389.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94087403599 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63759978265 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.421593830334 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 608.4 705.55239521 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 19.7664670659 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 64.0 22.8473053892 280% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 341.374021012 57.8364921388 590% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 320.333333333 119.503703932 268% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 64.8333333333 23.324526521 278% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.1666666667 5.70786347227 318% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297399826651 0.218282227539 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.174133687438 0.0743258471296 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.149830925302 0.0701772020484 214% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.156450297171 0.128457276422 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.112339576575 0.0628817314937 179% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 34.3 14.3799401198 239% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 6.52 48.3550499002 13% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 28.3 12.197005988 232% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.26 12.5979740519 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.32208582834 117% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 27.6 11.1389221557 248% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 28.0 11.9071856287 235% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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