It is important for school children to study music, art, and sports as it is for them to become literate and numerate. How far do you agree with this statement? Support your point of view with reasons and/or examples from your own experience.
Recently, the phenomenon of studying music, art and sport and its corresponding impacts has sparked a heated debate. Although contested by many the matter of its importance is highly beneficial, such issue is regarded thoroughly both constructive and positive by a substantial number of individuals. I am inclined to believe that sports, music can create enormous entertainment and learning them can be a plus, and I will analyze that throughout this essay.
First and the foremost, learning sports and music or any art make the children more confident and also make them mentally and physically strong which can provide the society with some noticeable effects which are rooted in the fact that merits of growing their capability under pressure as well as help find their inner strength which are inextricably bound up. According to my own experience, when I was a university student, I performed an academic experiment which discovered children who are not good in study and not able to get high grades can settle their career into their passion like music, art or sports. Thus, beneficial ramifications of studying music, art and sports apparently can be seen.
On the flip side, practicing risky sports can lead to serious injuries which might increase consequences of loosing more money. Moreover, fundamental aspects of loosing money on practicing, taking classes or diagnose injuries would related to this reality that the demerits of being solitary pertain to more mistakes during learning. As a tangible example, some scientific research undertaken by a prestigious university has asserted that the downside of loosing good health is correlated negatively with misguiding. Hence, it is correct to presume preconceived notion adverse effect on children's life.
To conclude, while there are compelling arguments on both sides, I profoundly believe that merits of learning music, art or sports which help to develop an overall intellectual personality and help to settle their career and make them famous for their passions outweigh its demerits. Thus, the positive aspects of studying these should be considered.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 233, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'relate'
Suggestion: relate
...king classes or diagnose injuries would related to this reality that the demerits of be...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, first, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, well, while, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 10.5418719212 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 6.10837438424 164% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 8.36945812808 203% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 14.0 5.94088669951 236% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 28.0 20.9802955665 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 31.9359605911 119% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.75862068966 69% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1796.0 1207.87684729 149% => OK
No of words: 333.0 242.827586207 137% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.39339339339 5.00649968141 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27180144563 3.92707691288 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88335519154 2.71678728327 106% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 139.433497537 143% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.600600600601 0.580463131201 103% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 379.143842365 146% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.57093596059 108% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.6157635468 87% => OK
Article: 2.0 1.56157635468 128% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.71428571429 233% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.931034482759 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.65517241379 82% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6551724138 95% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.5024630542 132% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 85.1464016986 50.4703680194 169% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.666666667 104.977214359 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.75 20.9669160288 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.58333333333 7.25397266985 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.12807881773 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.33497536946 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 6.9802955665 129% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 2.75862068966 72% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 2.91625615764 34% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163864362037 0.242375264174 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058268762944 0.0925447433944 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0346939871876 0.071462118173 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0949551823127 0.151781067708 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.031133140438 0.0609392437508 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 12.6369458128 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 53.1260098522 67% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.54236453202 171% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.9458128079 137% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 11.5310837438 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.1 8.32886699507 121% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 55.0591133005 196% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.94827586207 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.3980295567 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.5123152709 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 88.8888888889 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 80.0 Out of 90
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